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The Shiki Monthly Kukai

July 2009 Kukai

Dear Haiku Friends,

Here are the results for the July 2009 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was Mold/Mildew and our Free Format subject was Boat/Ship.

Congratulations to Rafal Zabratynski, winner of our Kigo section and to Karen J. McClintock, winner of our Free Format section!

The haiku are listed in order of total points received from voters. The numbers reflect the number of voters who gave the haiku either three points, two points, or one point -- followed by the total points for all votes.

Those who were given less than three points and who requested anonymity in such a case are so noted.

In the listing below, after each poem the author is listed, and then a three digit code revealing how many 3-point, 2-point, and 1-point points were cast for this poem by the other participating poets.

(214 = 12) would indicate that the poem above received two 3-point votes, one 2-point vote, and four 1-point votes.

Voters comments are in italics below the respective poems.

July 2009 Results
Kigo Theme:
Free Format Theme:

First Place -- 24 points
abandoned house
mold adds its pattern
to the wallpaper

Rafal Zabratynski
(1,4,13) = 24 pts

Such a common occurrence in old houses! A good observation, clearly and simply written.

Second Place -- 23 points
garden path
the old-forest fragrance
of leaf mold

Catherine J.S. Lee
(2,3,11) = 23 pts

thrift store painting
a pony dappled
with mildew

Melissa Spurr
(0,7,9) = 23 pts

Although I'd be tempted to change the line order and breaks, I love this dappled pony.

Third Place -- 22 points
summer house—
the calligraphy
of mildew

j cully
(2,4,8) = 22 pts

Fourth Place -- 21 points
morning sun-
the delicate peaks
of bread mold

Agnes Eva Savich
(2,4,7) = 21 pts

L1 & 2 set this up beautifully, without feeling at all contrived. And mold, especially under a microscope, is incredibly beautiful!

Fifth Place -- 19 points
moldy cheese -
a full moon glows
in the fog

(1,5,6) = 19 pts

Sixth Place -- 18 points
trial separation
I dust her roses
for powdery mildew

Tom Painting
(3,1,7) = 18 pts

Seventh Place -- 15 points
a row of mold-speckled shoes
at the entrance

Barbara A Taylor
(0,5,5) = 15 pts

August vacation
the forgotten peaches
mold in silence

(0,5,5) = 15 pts

Eighth Place -- 14 points
the mildew stain
on the ceiling
wedding night

Roberta Beary
(1,3,5) = 14 pts

A haiku so full of so many layers of meaning... of sadness too... but we don't know how the story ends. The third line comes as a real shock. So well composed!

cedar shingle mildew
the same shade of grey
on her hair

Audrey Downey
(0,5,4) = 14 pts

bookbinder’s workshop
he brushes a speck of mold
from my old Shakespeare

Patricia Prime
(0,3,8) = 14 pts

I like the use of the word speck, to resonate attention to detail.

Ninth Place -- 13 points
wartime diary
the smell of mildew
of all my youth

Dorota Pyra
(1,1,8) = 13 pts

Tenth Place -- 12 points
hard times
cutting the mold
off the cheese

(1,0,9) = 12 pts

A succinct statement; a direct no nonsense haiku.

first argument ~
on the bedroom ceiling
a blossom of mold

Paul Hodder
(0,3,6) = 12 pts

Not a good way to end the evening, but I think the juxtaposition is well worth it!

Eleventh Place -- 11 points
his love for her
only the love letters grew
old and moldy

Bill Hudson
(0,3,5) = 11 pts

family bible—
mildew wafts from the pages
my father once turned

Penny Harter
(0,2,7) = 11 pts

Twelfth Place -- 10 points
alone now
mold on the dishes
in the sink

Robert Ertman
(0,3,4) = 10 pts

setting moon . . .
white mold dwindles
the old potato

Mary Davila
(0,2,6) = 10 pts

Thirteenth Place -- 9 points
those shoes I always
threatened to wear

Barbara Campitelli
(1,1,4) = 9 pts

Fourteenth Place -- 8 points
chilly dawn
golden fungi rising
through the leaf mold

Elaine Riddell
(0,3,2) = 8 pts

the rose leaves touched
by mildew

Beth Powell
(0,3,2) = 8 pts

leaving the hospital
the scent of mildew
on the bus seats

Diane Mayr
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

All-Star Game . . .
my glove from the cellar
musty with mildew

Bill Pauly
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

Spanning time and awakening senses; presenting memories and memorabilia; a good reminiscing haiku.

Fifteenth Place -- 7 points
she tells her mother-in-law —
the moldy tortilla

Karen J. McClintock
(1,1,2) = 7 pts

years have passed
mold has grown
on the lovers' hearts

todd eddy
(1,0,4) = 7 pts

the scent of leaf mold
deep in the forest
a twig snaps

Jennifer Corpe
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

Nice appeal to the senses; the word 'deep' adds intrigue.

Sixteenth Place -- 6 points
in the bathhouse
scent of chlorine

doris Kasson
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

Seventeenth Place -- 5 points
slow mold in the bank-
My billfold of ideas
grows fat and lazy.

C Johanson
(1,1,0) = 5 pts

Southern hospitality
mildew in my shoe

Carolyn Coit Dancy
(1,0,2) = 5 pts

garbage can —
the stray dog wolfs
the moldy meat

Gautam Nadkarni
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

the foxing
on an old print
bearded lady

Barbara Snow
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

sixtieth birthday
a little mildew forming
on the shower tiles

Tom Genovese
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

musty smell
from the mildewed pages-
I read the book anyway

Ellen Romano
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

table for two-
besides a strong espresso
a mildew rose

oana posnaies
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

turned daily
the ripening wheel
of Stilton blue

Alan S. Bridges
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

St. Patrick's Day...
a green coat of mold
at the back of the fridge

Elinor Pihl Huggett
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

Eighteenth Place -- 4 points
sunny memories gawk
through a toothless smile
of a pale moldy photo

Nalini Hebbar
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

grief stricken hunger
dug hand deep rain soaked garbage
blossomed musty mould

Rajgiri Hebbar
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

a live kitten . . .
the dead soldier's
mildewed boot

Michael McClintock
(0,2,0) = 4 pts

camp out
we pick the mold
off the bread

carmel lively westerman
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

apple molds
in blue and gray
the academy

Garry Eaton
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

front stoop
mildew creeps up
the stairs

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

summer rain
last year's moldy gourds
even softer

Robin Beshers
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

Nineteenth Place -- 3 points
By my garden gate
a whole forest of mold,
shadow on gingerbread.

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

Wet and moldy
Babbling ditchwater serves
As my only companion

James Sawers
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

jungle outpost -
the last soldier,
mildew in his boots

A. Dharma Bum
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

after the rain -
a crack in the moldy wall
pushes out a weed

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

under the banyan
mildew in the shape
of buttocks

Nancy Smith
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

mildew -
the sound in the night
of a mosquito

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

farmer's angst:
acres of vineyards
in downy mildew

Keith A. Simmonds
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

This line 1 is a winner.

summer house
mildew and silverfish
run riot

Ruth Powell
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

the ex-wives—
he scrapes some mold
off the cheese

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

beach resort—
a mold-shaped mouse
on the gluetrap


First Place -- 32 pts
in the shipwreck
a china doll
with open eyes

Karen J. McClintock
(3,5,13) = 32 pts

I like the surprise in Line 3.

A doll is skillfully used here to help us imagine the fear onboard. Good job!

This one is extraordinary: resonant, evocative, minimal to good effect. The haunting image lingers in my mind.

Second Place -- 29 pts
show and tell
for the AA meeting —
ship in a bottle

— andrea
(4,3,9) = 27 pts

This gave me a chuckle.

Third Place -- 24 pts
evening hush
a kayak parts
the duckweed

Susan Constable
(2,4,10) = 24 pts

Fourth Place -- 20 pts
moonlit marina
the boats lightly rub
against each other

Rafal Zabratynski
(0,5,10) = 20 pts

Fifth Place -- 19 pts
the world in two
a ship's wake

Dejan Pavlinovic
(1,5,6) = 19 pts

Sixth Place -- 18 pts
my rowboat
adrift in the blues
summer's end

Tom Painting
(1,4,7) = 18 pts

Seventh Place -- 17 pts
after Katrina
a pirogue weaves
down Bourbon Street

Alan S. Bridges
(1,3,8) = 17 pts

Eighth Place -- 16 pts
going home
all the gulls follow
the fishing boat

Bruce Ross
(1,2,9) = 16 pts

Ninth Place -- 15 pts
the silence
after stowing oars-
boat in mist

Agnes Eva Savich
(0,3,9) = 15 pts

Tenth Place -- 14 pts
hauled into the boat the slap slap slap of a salmon

Andre Surridge
(1,4,3) = 14 pts

I like the alliteration in this one.

autumn sea . . .
a sail sways among
the whitecaps

(1,2,7) = 14 pts

her name
on a moored boat
summer ends

Petar Tchouhov
(0,2,10) = 14 pts

Ah . . . perhaps not just the summer has ended. The touch of mystery is interesting.

Eleventh Place -- 12 pts
summer night
a freighter’s horn lengthens
through the fog

Catherine J.S. Lee
(1,2,5) = 12 pts

L2 with 'lengthens' at the end helps us hear what the poet heard.

Twelfth Place -- 11 pts
leaky boat -
just you and me
and the river

Marianna Monaco
(1,2,4) = 11 pts

a fishing boat
rambling upon the sea
towed by the moon

Keith A. Simmonds
(0,4,3) = 11 pts

Thirteenth Place -- 10 pts
the ferry’s wake
amidst a swirl of city lights
her scribbled number

John Thompson
(0,2,6) = 10 pts

Fourteenth Place -- 9 pts
beach panhandler
the ribs of a wrecked ship
jut from the sand

Melissa Spurr
(0,2,5) = 9 pts

goodbyes said . . .
tasting salt
in the boat's wake

Ellen Compton
(0,2,5) = 9 pts

Fifteenth Place -- 8 pts
a lone white sail
breaching the horizon
. . . . then another

Ed Higgins
(1,1,3) = 8 pts

the red rowboat
carried out by the tide

Meredith Cavalieri
(0,1,6) = 8 pts

Sixteenth Place -- 7 pts
...when our ship comes in...
a family built on
decades of hope

Merrill Ann Gonzales
(2,0,1) = 7 pts

I thought this was philosophical, abiding, and interestingly written.

calla lilies
a crone rows a skiff
around the lake

Carolyn Hall
(1,0,4) = 7 pts

waving goodbye ~
the ship's
widening wake

Paul Hodder
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

A very well observed scene, which also brings out the feelings of sadness as one watches others leave on a ship.

summer still-life
she colors the rusted boat

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

alone on the beach
watching a ship disappear
into nothingness

natalia kuznetsova
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

waterline . . .
boats tilting
toward open sea

Patrick M. Pilarski
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

Seventeenth Place -- 6 pts
rippling pond
paddle boats swish by
the water lily

Frances McCarthy
(1,0,3) = 6 pts

crashing waves-
the warship
now a coral reef

A. Dharma Bum
(0,0,6) = 6 pts

Eighteenth Place -- 5 pts
boating dock -
the anchor holds
broken rope

Alexander "Lex" Joy
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

overturned boat,
drawn high on the shore –
drumming of rain

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

A lovely watery haiku. I particularly like the word "drumming" here, as it shows how ample the rainfall is.

a boat rides on a river –
hitchhiking on my shoulder
a butterfly

Daniela Bullas
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

shimmering moonlight
tethered boats
rocking with the stars

Ben Gieske
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

waiting for the wind-
the next paper boat sails
into the sunset

Jacek M.
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

morning mist
a departing boat
betrayed by its mast

Tom Genovese
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

Nineteenth Place -- 4 pts
Cape Cod June—
in the sun
all the boats are new

Marylouise Knight
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

tiny boats float
in the kiddie pool

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

origami ship
drifts downstream
crescent moon

Terra Martin
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

a red kayak
dipping into the rapids
water ouzel

Barbara Snow
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

Nile wind
fills the felucca’s sail
time travel

Ann K. Schwader
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

Charred boats on the shore.
I, too, have to continue
my journey.

Horst Ludwig
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

rock pool
reflections of rippled light
inside the shipwreck

Elaine RIddell
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

Twentieth Place -- 3 pts
we say, "I do"
in the cruse ship chapel
gardenia scent

John Daleiden
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

there is no-one but
footprints on the beach
from the ship wreck

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

iron jaws open
to swallow the next ship...
Soo Locks

Elinor Pihl Huggett
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

after the storm
an empty boat floats
towards the beach

D.V. Rozic
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

fireworks ended —
red and green lights
return to the harbor

Deanna Tiefenthal
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

goose bumps . . .
a pirate ship drifts
in the shallows

Jennifer Corpe
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

ocean voyage-
the ship heading for
a double rainbow

Barbara Campitelli
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

halfway down the drainpipe
his toy boat

doris kasson
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

sail boats line up
to enter the harbour -
we leave with the sun

Mike Montreuil
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

his new boat
the “Swan Song”

Carolyn Coit Dancy (0,0,3) = 3 pts

howling night winds. . .
a catamaran arrives
on a wave

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

We're left to fill in the story for ourselves: did the boat come in with, or without, its passengers onboard? Nicely done.

canoe moves
slowly in circles
she doesn't get it

Diane Mayr
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

shipwreck -
on the waves
only a bottle

Virginia Popescu
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

General Comments:

This is always fun, thank you!

As usual the haiku were very difficult to pick from. They are all so well written and evoke lasting impressions.

A hard choice this time, made only slightly easier by ruling out the haiku which did not use "mold" or "mildew" as a genuine kigo.

This theme seemed to produce a fair number of desk haiku and some picture book scenes a bit too twee for haiku. There still remained excellent haiku to take the points!

Thank you for participating in the July 2009 Kukai! We will be posting the August Call for Submissions on Sunday, August 2. See you then!

With much appreciation,

The Shiki Kukai Team

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