May 2006 Kukai

Dear haiku friends,

This was a stand-out month for the kukai and for a few reasons. First we would like to extend our appreciation and thanks to the many who complimented the kigo and free format entries for their high quality. We can't credit the topic choices, it was your work!

Secondly, a few poets offered comments and we formatted those with the results. We'd like to encourage this. More discussion please! If you offer enough comments to make it unwieldy to include with results, we'd be delighted to put up a supplement page for the workshops.

Lastly, we had another high voter turnout. !!THANK YOU!!

Here are the results for the MAY 006 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was "LONG DAY" and our Free Format subject was "BUCKET OR PAIL".

The haiku are listed in order of total points received from voters. The numbers reflect the number of voters who gave the haiku either three points, two points, or one point -- followed by the total points for all votes.

Those who were given less than three points and who requested anonymity in such a case are so noted.

We pulled one kigo entry at the author's request.

The results of the voting have been tabulated and are listed below.

Congratulations to Scott Metz, the winner of our Kigo section, and to Kathy Lippard Cobb, the winner of our Free Format section!

In the listing below, after each poem the author is listed, and then a three digit code revealing how many 3-point, 2-point, and 1-point points were cast for this poem by the other participating poets.

(214 = 12) would indicate that the poem above received two 3-point votes, one 2-point vote, and four 1-point votes.

May 2006 Results
Kigo Theme:
Long Day
Free Format Theme:
Bucket or Pail

First Place -- 26 pts
long day—
she washes tomorrow's rice
in the dark

Scott Metz
(2,6,8) = 26 pts

Second Place -- 19 pts
long day
the dog's chain wrapped
around the tree

Earl Keener
(0,4,11) = 19 pts

Third Place -- 16 pts
long day—
grandma takes
a second nap

Zhanna P. Rader
(1,3,7) = 16 pts

Fourth Place -- 15 pts
long day—
the snake curled
in a rooster's shadow

dustin neal
(1,3,6) = 15 pts

a long day
the spider's web
begins to sag

doris kasson
(0,2,11) = 15 pts

Fifth Place -- 14 pts
his last shingle covers
a spot of moonlight...
the long day

ed markowski
(1,3,5) = 14 pts

Comment: wish I had more points to give to this one. It is totally excellent! Perfect ah-ha moment

Sixth Place -- 12 pts
the long day
in the widow's eyes
longer still

Darrell Lindsey
(0,2,8) = 12 pts

Seventh Place -- 11 pts
long day
the lover's share a pull
of saltwater taffy

Tom Painting
(1,3,2) = 11 pts

Eighth Place -- 10 pts
long day—
the night cricket
on all channels

(1,3,1) = 10 pts

another long day
only the coolness of
a snail track

angelee deodhar
(0,3,4) = 10 pts

Ninth Place -- 9 pts
long day
the edge of the road
blurred by rain

Laryalee Fraser
(1,1,4) = 9 pts

long day . . .
my neighbor's off-key song
crystal clear

Kala Ramesh
(1,0,6) = 9 pts

a long day—
still I dream
of more light

Linda Marucci
(0,3,3) = 9 pts

long day...
dragging the lawn chair
to the last bit of sun

Paul R
(0,2,5) = 9 pts

Tenth Place -- 8 pts
long day
counting pearls
on her string

Denise Lizarraga
(1,2,1) = 8 pts

after a long day
coming out of the subway
the scent of lilacs

Kate Creighton
(1,2,1) = 8 pts

long day
cabbage butterflies
in pairs

susan delphine delaney
(1,0,5) = 8 pts

after the long day
crumpled wedding dress
lies on the floor

Maria Kowal
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

long day
the milk bottle

Allan Burns
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

long day
summer flowers all over
her dress

max verhart
(0,1,6) = 8 pts

Eleventh Place -- 7 pts
long day
grape tendrils reach
and curl

Mark Hollingsworth
(1,2,0) = 7 pts

long day
the road goes on
and on

Grzegorz Sionkowski
(1,1,2) = 7 pts

long day
shadows fade
into twilight

Bill Kenney
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

long day
the first lawnmower
at dawn

-- ushi
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

long day
swallows inspect
their old nest

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

long day ...
shadows stretch
to touch the dusk

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

broken mower
a long day
gets shorter

Dave Bacharach
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

the long day
two gardeners chatting
over the fence

Ruth Franke
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

long day—
a melted popsicle
on the sidewalk

Israel López Balan
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

Twelfth Place -- 6 pts
longest day—
the faded blinds
of the old people's home

Paul Hodder
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

one hatched egg
a long day

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

long day—
the sun goes to bed
after I do

Vaughn Seward
(0,0,6) = 6 pts

Thirteenth Place -- 5 pts
long day—
happy to see my old friends,
the earthworms

--Irene Golas
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

long day
the first kick
of the evening drink

(0,2,1) = 5 pts

stick by stick
the house sparrows knit
the minutes of the long day

Suzume Shi
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

long day . . .
the sun dips
into the sea

Kathy Lippard Cobb
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

a long day —
from eaves to the ground
spider's thread

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

long day —
the snail finally reaches
an iris bloom

Warren Gossett
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

the long day
our house finch
sings an encore

Barbara Campitelli
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

long day—
the night air smells
of skunk

Paul Hunter
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

long day
her lilac skirt falls
over hot stone

j blain
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

long day
poplar seeds drift past
the office window

polona o.
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

Fourteenth Place -- 4 pts
long day . . .
frustration wrinkles
across his forehead

Marie Summers
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

a long day...
in the rubbish heap
her ginger braid

(1,0,1) = 4 pts

a long rainy day—
petals of our cherry
blossom in the grass

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

a long day
two small morels
sizzle in butter

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

long rainy day —
a snail reaches the tip
of the iris leaf

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

Fifteenth Place -- 3 pts
spring wedding
a cold, gray drizzle
makes for a long day

(1,0,0) = 3 pts

above the road
a raven plays the thermal
end to a long day

Chandra Bales
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

my friend will die
...the longest day

Rose Marie Stutts, EdD
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

long day
the ball a bit bigger
than the sun

Petar Tchouhov
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

long day
the Narwhal swims
belly up

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

long day
flashes of sunlight
on a cyclist's shorts

Mary Stevens
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

long day —
a bee lingers near
the apple blossoms

Bruce Feingold
(0,0,3) = 3 pts


"Just thought I'd say that this was the best bunch of kigo haiku I've seen from the list in a long time. Hard to vote!"

"It was really difficult this month, lots of wonderful haikus (and at times, a decidedly western take on the kigo "long day"). It took some time to pare my choices down ..."

"Thanks guys, a very interesting mixture of ideas..."

"Thanks. This kigo produced a lot of good poems."

"tough choices as always"

"All of these are great ..."

First Place -- 29 pts
sand pail . . .
the toddler scoops the sea
with a teaspoon

Kathy Lippard Cobb
(3,4,12) = 29 pts

Second Place -- 25 pts
day's end
a bunch of daisies
in his bait pail

Tom Painting
(0,7,11) = 25 pts

Third Place -- 23 pts
temple gate —
a blind beggar’s pail fills
with blossoms

Kala Ramesh
(1,6,8) = 23 pts

Fourth Place -- 21 pts
old pea field —
the rusted bucket full
of grandpa's shadow

dustin neal
(0,7,7) = 21 pts

Fifth Place -- 18 pts
sheet lightning
the upside down bucket
starts drumming

(1,4,7) = 18 pts

"Very best of the bucket turned musical instrument ku, show don't tell"

Sixth Place -- 17 pts
an empty pail
I too
am lonely

(0,4,9) = 17 pts

old bucket

William M. Gottlieb
(0,4,9) = 17 pts

"Wonderful... gets the point across! Awesome!"

Seventh Place -- 16 pts
carwash —
a butterfly circles
the yellow pail

Israel López Balan
(0,3,10) = 16 pts

"Good example of show, don't tell. Butterfly looking for water."

Eighth Place -- 13 pts
Hong Kong market —
the scraping of crab claws
in the pail

Beverley George
(1,3,4) = 13 pts

adobe bucket
mosquitoes rise
out of the sun

(1,1,8) = 13 pts

Ninth Place -- 12 pts
new moon
the old pail

Petar Tchouhov
(1,1,7) = 12 pts

Tenth Place -- 10 pts
after the vet's
squeaky toys silent
in the red pail

roberta beary
(2,0,4) = 10 pts

"...sad, but well written"

hard rain
tadpoles in the pail
grow legs

Melanie Alberts
(1,0,7) = 10 pts

night rain
the waning moon slips
into the bucket

polona o.
(0,3,4) = 10 pts

window cleaning
the bucket lands
before I do

-- lucindab
(0,1,8) = 10 pts

"cute and funny"

Eleventh Place -- 9 pts
corner florist —
last lily in his pail
sold for a kiss

(0,1,7) = 9 pts

murky day —
the garden bucket
upside down

(0,2,5) = 9 pts

Twelfth Place -- 8 pts
home from vacation
the ocean's smell clings
to the toy pail

Agnes Eva Savich
(0,3,2) = 8 pts

two earthworms
in the compost bucket —
moving day

--Irene Golas
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

"Delightful! Reader gets put into the composter's position of seeing the earthworm's as having a forced moving day."

late afternoon —
a hungry cat circles
my fishing pail

Tristan Coleridge
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

Thirteenth Place -- 6 pts
end of day
pink sand pail
floating in the tide pool

Denise Lizarraga
(1,0,3) = 6 pts

the moon tonight quietly rests
in my pail

john tiong chunghoo
(0,3,0) = 6 pts

dinner in a bucket . . .
preferring breasts
over legs and thighs

Marie Summers
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

stopping to rest —
clouds settle
in the water pail

Paul Hodder
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

old wishing well —
an echo as the wooden pail
strikes deep water

Nancy Smith
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

Fourteenth Place -- 5 pts
cat tails following
the milk bucket
trail of anticipation

(0,2,1) = 5 pts

grandpa's farm
the first pail of milk
filled before sunrise

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

fresh paint
a bucket of daisies
by the hearth

-Deborah P Kolodji
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

patchy grass
under the rain gutter
a dusty bucket

doris kasson
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

family picnic —
a pailful of melons
cools in the stream

angelee deodhar
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

Fifteenth Place -- 4 pts
bathing with a bucket
and a cup —
leader of the coup

(1,0.1) = 4 pts

"Absolutely fantastic. Definitely a "show don't tell", and concise! How the mighty have fallen! I can't say enough good things about this one."

first light
a loaf of snow
in the garden trug

susan delphine delaney
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

the bucket hits
against the well wall —
scattered stars

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

dented pail
still causing ripples
in the well

max verhart
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

Sixteenth Place -- 3 pts
little sand pail shako
pretend trumpet... marching
I watch her not the band

Rose Marie Stutts, EdD
(1,0,0,) = 3 pts

fishing boats climb waves
deck hands bend over tin buckets
clouds wear black robes

Carole A. Borges
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

the gardener holds
a pail of tadpoles
April clouds

Bruce Ross
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

beside his shoes
a bucket of green frogs
seeking shade

Chandra Bales
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

vernal equinox
the rust-eaten bucket
half full of water

-- Derwisz
((0,1,1) = 3 pts

phone call —
my grandson finds
the paint bucket

Laryalee Fraser
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

roadside fruit stand —
buckets of peaches stop
passing motorists

Zhanna P. Rader
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

home from the picnic
with empty pails
and blueberry smiles

Paul R
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

"Says it all. Best of the berry picking haiku."

a frog inhabits
the waterspout bucket —
spring rain

Warren Gossett
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

summer night
the Moon hiding the stars
in a bucket of water

Zeljka Vucinic-Jambresic
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

three day rain
the ash bucket

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

grandpa’s house —
standing on a pail
to reach a water glass

aom (tim)
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

"...a lot of smiles in the free format section.... I think we'll have chicken and beer for dinner tonight!"

"...this excellent batch of poems!"

"Another good subject."

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