June 2006 Kukai

Dear haiku friends,

Another interesting month and not just for the variety of coverage the entries gave to the words chosen for the kigo and free format sections. We inadvertently had a name left on some of the calls for votes sent out but not on the web site or on the private e-mailings. Normally we would have pulled the entry and contacted those casting votes for it. This time more than a day and more than thirty votes had been received before notice. In the interest of fairness to the poet involved, we allowed the entry to remain in play. To be completely fair, we are also going to include this month's fourth place haiku of the free format section in this years Annual Poet's Choice, since it would have been moved to third under other circumstances.

Here are the results for the June 2006 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was "Humid" and the Free Format subject was "Turtle".

The haiku are listed in order of total points received from voters. The numbers reflect the number of voters who gave the haiku either three points, two points, or one point -- followed by the total points for all votes.

Those who were given less than three points and who requested anonymity in such a case are so noted.

The results of the voting have been tabulated and are listed below.

Congratulations to Warren Gossett , the winner of our Kigo section, and to Denise Lizarraga, the winner of our Free Format section!

In the listing below, after each poem the author is listed, and then a three digit code revealing how many 3-point, 2-point, and 1-point points were cast for this poem by the other participating poets.

(214 = 12) would indicate that the poem above received two 3-point votes, one 2-point vote, and four 1-point votes.

June 2006 Results
Kigo Theme:
Free Format Theme:

First Place -- 39 pts
humid night
only the cat's tail stirs
the curtains

Warren Gossett
(1,10,16) = 39 pts

* ~I love the image that this conveys. Nothing moving except the cat's tail. Lovely!
* A gentle complementing of images here

Second Place -- 35 pts
humid night
the ice cream vendor
pulls back her hair

Tom Painting
(2,8,13) = 35 pts

* ~A wonderfully simple way of describing the humid evening. * A whole childhood of summer memories is brought back by a poet simply making note of this gesture in the right context.
* Capturing the simple and eloquent gesture.

Third Place -- 26 pts
humid night -
the old dog runs
in his sleep

sheila windsor
(2,4,12) = 26 pts

* True to life humor * Very close to home

Fourth Place -- 20 pts
humid night
a cloud spreads open
for the moon

Agnes Eva Savich
(1,4,9) = 20 pts

* I liked the "double layer" in poem #2: a new perspective on the night sky plus the erotic overtone. Simple, well-chosen words work well together to present both a literal image and a suggestive one.

Fifth Place -- 17 pts
hot and humid--
the neighbor shouts
in spanish

Kathy Lippard Cobb
(2,2,7) = 17 pts

Sixth Place -- 16 pts
humid evening
swallows in and out of
the sprinkler

-- ushi
(1,3,7) = 16 pts

* Not flashy, just very simple, and effective humor. I have seen this happen on many evenings with all kinds of birds.

humid haze
sticky even before
this mango

susan delphine delaney
(0,5,6) = 16 pts

humid night—
the same book
twice as thick

Marie Summers
(0,4,8) = 16 pts

Seventh Place -- 14 pts
crematorium -
the lobby smelling
of humid coats

max verhart
(1,2,7) = 14 pts

Eighth Place -- 13 pts
humid night-
the space between
. . . raindrops

ron moss
(0,5,3) = 13 pts

humid night
through an open window
the scent of rain

Lynne Rees
(0,2,9) = 13 pts

Ninth Place -- 12 pts
humid morning
the weight
of dew

doris kasson
(1,3,3) = 12 pts

humid morning
my hair
finally curls

City Girl
(1,0,9) = 12 pts

* It's all in the point of view.

Tenth Place -- 11 pts
long humid night
a creaking fan syncopates
with the crickets

cate juno
(0,4,3) = 11 pts

Eleventh Place -- 9 pts
oh the humidity!
i pick some wedding rice
from your cheek

aom (tim)
(1,1,4) = 9 pts

humid air
jasmine blossoms
children count stars

(0,4,1) = 9 pts

Twelfth Place -- 8 pts
these humid nights
staring at the sound
of the ceiling fan

Bill Kenney
(1,1,3) = 8 pts

humid day
gnats move
the cow's eyelids

(1,1,3) = 8 pts

Thirteenth Place -- 7 pts
humid morning-
my favorite shirt

Mary Chapman
(1,1,2) = 7 pts

the ice tea and I
humid day

Bill Hudson
(1,1,2) = 7 pts

humid night
mosquitoes circle
the tent flap

Laryalee Fraser
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

* Been there! The second discomfort heightens awareness of the first to excruciating.

humid day:
ducks in the shade
of the willow

--Irene Golas
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

high humidity
the bathing suits still wet
on the porch rail

(0,1,5) = 7 pts

* True to life. And so we'd put them back on and return to the lake :-)
* Evokes a well remembered experience with even the faint smell of suits damp until they turn a bit sour.

Fourteenth Place -- 6 pts
bowing with the priest
in the humid evening,
a tall sunflower

Darrell Lindsey
(2,0,0) = 6 pts

humid sunset
petals of the wild rose
grow pinker

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

without air conditioning --
raised voices

-Deborah P Kolodji
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

humid night
drowning in the scent
of rotting flowers

Beverley George
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

humid day -
a cat on the roof
licks itself

Israel López Balan
(0,0,6) = 6 pts

Fifteenth Place -- 5 pts
sultry evening
the cool brush
of humid lips

(0,2,1) = 5 pts

It's been too humid
This Cinco De Mayo
To make piñatas

Linda Warner
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

humid dawn--
the sparkle of raindrops left
on high voltage wires

Gillena Cox
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

humid afternoon
the man's arm and tea glass
both sweat

Cliff Roberts
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

tokyo summer
stillness in
the humid air

john tiong chunghoo
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

Humid day:
his ink dish stays wet
'til late afternoon

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

* Every time I read it I add more details to the mental painting I'm making from this.

humid morning
choosing not to
sweep the cobweb

polona o.
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

humid park --
the fountain launches
a rainbow

(0,1,3) = 5 pts

humid evening –
we kindle the campfire
on the third try

Zhanna P. Rader
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

Sixteenth Place -- 4 pts
a little humid ~
the aide strips
dad's sheets

roberta beary
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

* The power of understatement and implication. Why say everything?

humid afternoon
ladies scrub their rugs
on the sidewalk

isa fakir
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

humid evening--
peonies blush red
when she kisses me

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

humid summer night
fan humming
one endless note

Simply Maire
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

* Here it's the grinding monotony of one image which heightens the other to produce a vivid sense of sleepless discomfort.

humid day -
nine months pregnant
she showers a third time

Leslie Montgomery
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

humid monday -
red kimono
bowed on the washing line

Paul Hodder
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

* ~Even the red kimono, otherwise so crisp and decorous, has wilted in the humidity. A delightful haiku.

Seventeenth Place -- 3 pts
humid spell
my coconut candy
doesn't set

Zaida Lysle
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

a lazy fly sticks
to the wall

Linda Marucci
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

humid fragrance--
a honeysuckled fence
blocks the east wind

-Jason Ferguson
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

humid day--
an empty hammock
and my book

Mary Lee McClure
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

humid morning
pheasants calling
deep in the woods

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

humid day
brown figs gathered
in a small box

Bruce Ross
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

by a hummingbird
this humid day

Chandra Bales
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

rain soaked garden--
the humidity rising
with the sun

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

humid morning
a yellow leaf
on the dog's fur

Petar Tchouhov
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

humid afternoon
air wringing itself out
on me

Mary Wuest
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

humid dusk –
even the firefly’s glow
seems too warm

Nancy Smith
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

humid day
he leaves her
without a word

Gabriel Sawicki
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

humid afternoon -
scattered on satin sheets
first cherries

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

First Place -- 27 pts
mexican village
the old woman sips soup
from a turtle shell

Denise Lizarraga
(1,7,10) = 27 pts

* For me this communicates a meditative moment where life is so hard one must chose one life over another. As the name is unknown to me it didn't influence my choice.

Second Place -- 24 pts
winter sky -
a bleached turtle shell
full of leaves

Chris Eichenberger
(2,3,12) = 24 pts

* I would give this haiku more pts. if I could....lovely imagery
* An appealing visual haiku; I see the scene as bleak and beautiful.

Third Place -- 22 pts
show and tell--
his box turtle
won't come out

aom (tim)
(0,4,14) = 22 pts

* I share the young one's disappointment and chagrin.
* Excellent! I'd give this one more points, if I had them. How often does nature not co-operate with mankind's intentions? VERY WELL DONE! THE BEST poem, IMO!

Fourth Place -- 21 pts
old turtle
lagging behind
its shadow

Petar Tchouhov
(2,3,9) = 21 pts

Fifth Place -- 20 pts
egg moon -
a green turtle climbs
the beach

(2,4,6) = 20 pts

Sixth Place -- 19 pts
I too wish to think
outside the box

Tom Painting
(0,6,7) = 19 pts

Seventh Place -- 18 pts
just a matter
of time

Mary Lee McClure
(1,6,3) = 18 pts

* Very concise, "time" can be taken two ways: turtles live long, or turtles are slow moving creatures.

summer morning –
a white butterfly warms up
on a turtle's back

Zhanna P. Rader
(1,4,7) = 18 pts

Eighth Place -- 16 pts
on his upper arm
the old man's tattoo
a wrinkled turtle

max verhart
(2,2,6) = 16 pts

* the indirect approach to a topic, this time of aging. The word 'old' becomes superfluous, but I'm voting on the theme I've identified of "show, not tell."

Ninth Place -- 12 pts
turtle-neck sweater
--hiding the hickey
from dad

brenda roberts
(0,2,8) = 12 pts

* Hahaha, teenaged daughter! Good ah-ha moment.

Tenth Place -- 10 pts
at the curb
running away from home
the boy's turtle

Cliff Roberts
(1,2,3) = 10 pts

to let the sea turtle pass
night jogger

susan delphine delaney
(0,3,4) = 10 pts

holding traffic . . .
the turtle
in the old man's hands

Dustin Neal
(0,3,4) = 10 pts

midday sun --
a turtle's shadow
on the algae

Laryalee Fraser
(0,2,6) = 10 pts

Eleventh -- 9 pts
the mother winces
as her baby's head pushes
through the turtleneck

cate juno
(1,2,2) = 9 pts

milky-colored moon -
heave of a green sea turtle
laying white eggs

Bruce H. Feingold
(1,1,4) = 9 pts

a turtle's shadow
on the move

Ann K. Schwader
(0,4,1) = 9 pts

Twelfth Place -- 8 pts
in the sand...
tourist turtles
up to their necks

(0,3,2) = 8 pts

truck stop café-
a turtle shell ashtray
lit by the moon

r o n . m o s s
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

* Echoes Basho's ideal of mixing the mundane object with the elegant topic.

pottery class--
the little girl who works so slowly
makes a turtle

Linda P.
(0,1,6) = 8 pts

Thirteenth Place -- 7 pts
traffic jam
a turtle walks

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

first sunbeam
chasing the turtle
up the dune

(0,2,3) = 7 pts

reflecting pond
a box turtle travels
the length of my cane

ed markowski
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

* Not funny in the way #8 is, but again shows us the turtle is slow without merely telling us that.

a little boy peers through
an empty turtle shell

Marie Summers
(0,0,7) = 7 pts

* good connection between the foreclosure on a mortgage and the empty turtle shell.
* Technically okay and a telling metaphor, it still read to me without 'heart' like the 'empty shell'.

Fourteenth Place -- 6 pts
a turtle race...
though you came last,
you're my turtle!

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

* Almost 'too cute' it none-the-less communicates its loyalty.

Fifteenth Place -- 5 pts
Boston Aquarium
the turtle scrapes its fin
on a window frame

Bruce Ross
(1,0,2) = 5 pts

through the garden
turtle speed

(0,2,1) = 5 pts

snapping turtle
the swimming hole

Barbara Snow
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

her pet turtle
left in my care—
we're still friends

Bill Kenney
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

summer storm-
a turtle paperweight
holds down my papers

angelee deodhar
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

Sixteenth Place -- 4 pts
turtle dove
how like a pigeon's
is your poop

Colin Stewart Jones
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

the gardener trips
over a turtle sculpture--
purple dahlias

(1,0,1) = 4 pts

a sandy beach—
in my meager pot
turtle soup

John Daleiden
(0,2,0) = 4 pts

summer breeze -
another turtle arrives
to the pond

Israel López Balan
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

stepping into the road
to help him cross
I become the turtle

suzume shi
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

water hole
the three-legged turtle

polona o.
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

* Three-legged: poor fellow had a mishap or narrow escape.

twilight beach -
a turtle peeps out
peeps in

Narayanan Raghunathan
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

summer evening
another pink turtle
slips into the sea

j blain
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

Seventeenth Place -- 3 pts
the turtle lies still
in the shadows --
no one is home

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

garden turtle
just can't move - cherry petal
on its back

Boris Nazansky
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

up-ended turtle:
head and limbs flail
in the gentle breeze

Vaughn Seward
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

sea turtle-
in the moonlight
returns to the ocean

Mary Chapman
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

turtle in box
climbing all day
nowhere to go

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

* Leaves the reader with a sad feeling. Poor confined creature.Well written.

turtle crossing
it's suggested that you
bring your lunch

Karen Briggs
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

* I expected ku on slow turtles. This says so without directly saying so.
* I like the dry humor here.
* Hahaha! good senryu! Too bad I didn't have enough points to vote for this one, too!

painted turtles bask
on a mud bank

Warren Gossett
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

crossing path
with a turtle

john tiong chunghoo
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

day moon
the turtle naps
under a shade tree

Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

walking home
under a full moon
snapping turtle

Lynne Rees
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

turtle derby
rookie journalist's
photo finish

-- ushi
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

* Again the indirect approach to showing us real life. Yet the humor is not for the turtle, but the career of journalism.
* The journalist's been given an "unimportant" assignment? A lot to be construed here. Nice.

uphill climb
a turtle
races beside me

doris kasson
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

evening stroll --
whistling granddad overtakes
a turtle

Nancy Smith
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

Thanks for another good month of haiku and comments, it keeps the kukai vibrant. We will be posting the next Call for Submissions on or about July 3rd and look forward to hearing from you!

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