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August 2008 Kukai

Dear Haiku Friends,

Here are the results for the August 2008 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was "Spiders" and our Free Format theme was "Home Improvement".

Congratulations to Paul Hodder, winner of our Kigo section and to Carolyn Coit Dancy AND Melissa Spurr, winners of our Free Format section!

The haiku are listed in order of total points received from voters. The numbers reflect the number of voters who gave the haiku either three points, two points, or one point -- followed by the total points for all votes.

Those who were given less than three points and who requested anonymity in such a case are so noted.

In the listing below, after each poem the author is listed, and then a three digit code revealing how many 3-point, 2-point, and 1-point points were cast for this poem by the other participating poets.

(214 = 12) would indicate that the poem above received two 3-point votes, one 2-point vote, and four 1-point votes.

Voters comments are in italics below the respective poems.

August 2008 Results
Kigo Theme:
Free Format Theme:
Home Improvement

First Place – Twenty-three Points
widow's cottage ~
every spider
has a name

Paul Hodder
(2,4,9) = 23 Pts

Fortunate spiders! This is lovely.

An amusing observation of how loneliness may be kept at bay.

Second Place – Twenty-two Points
old farmhouse
the weaving loom filled
with spider silk

Melissa Spurr
(1,5,9) = 22 Pts

on the front porch
knitting beside grandmother
the spider

Bill Hudson
(1,3,13) = 22 Pts

receding clouds
a spider mends
its net

(0,7,8) = 22 Pts

So simple and beautiful. Can a spider catch a cloud? Maybe when I wasn’t watching. Every day we miss something.

Third Place – Twenty Points
attic window
a spider spreads his web
on the moon

Jacek M.
(1,6,5) = 20 Pts

Fourth Place – Nineteen Points
house guest
a spider unfolds
with the blinds

Susan Constable
(1,2,12) = 19 Pts

Fifth Place – Sixteen Points
spider's web
first frost

(2,2,6) = 16 Pts

Empty with transparent nothing in. Thin, white threads and my foggy breath. Not even a spider.

This made me want to try to see this in my own yard this year!

old easel -
in the spider's web
a still life

Dorota Pyra
(0,4,8) = 16 Pts

Sixth Place – Fifteen Points
a spider web nets
the setting sun

tom painting
(2,1,7) = 15 Pts

I appreciate the skillful weaving and word choice here.

Seventh Place – Fourteen Points
on my computer,
a spider
viewing the web

Jyothirmai Gubili
(1,4,3) = 14 Pts

A great dual use of spider as literal and also as a bot churning across the internet.

Eighth Place – Thirteen Points
summer cleaning
a spider takes shelter
under the buddha

Tore Sverredal
(0,4,5) = 13 Pts

The perfect place to seek refuge. This is delightful.

Ninth Place – Twelve Points
twilight --
a spider's shadow
climbs the screen

Ann K. Schwader
(0,3,6) = 12 Pts

Twilight and a shadow on a screen. I love how everything in this haiku is on the edge of something else.

Tenth Place – Eleven Points
starry night
the spider's web
studded with moths

ed markowski
(1,2,4) = 11 Pts

I love this image - to me, it's a really 'living' haiku.

As with several of the submissions, I get a dιjΰ vu feeling that something like this has been offered in the kukai before. But I like it. I like "Starry Night," too.

spider web
the sunrise caught
in its dew

N. C. Whitehead
(1,2,4) = 11 Pts

a spider
diligently repairs
the hole in my shed

Frederick C. Gier
(0,4,3) = 11 Pts

Eleventh Place – Ten Points
garden spider
a ripe plum tomato
just beyond its web

(1,2,3) = 10 Pts

in the spider's web
that useless moon

Beth Powell
(1,1,5) = 10 Pts

I like the idea of all the web's unintended "catches"

Twelfth Place – Nine Points
new house...
a spider comes out of
the book carton

K. Ramesh
(0,2,5) = 9 Pts

Cue the music from Jaws.

every night somehow
the front door spider and I
forget each other

Shelley Krause
(0,1,7) = 9 Pts

Thirteenth Place – Eighth Points
spring cleaning
moving the spider web
to another corner

(1,1,3) = 8 Pts

flat calm
a spider climbs
the rigging

Josh Wikoff
(1,1,3) = 8 Pts

house spider
in our corners we wait
for each other

(0,3,2) = 8 Pts

Fourteenth Place – Seven Points
web compass
a spider points out
eight directions

john tiong chunghoo
(0,1,5) = 7 Pts

Spiderweb as alternative aid to wayfinding... I like it.

only a speckled
spider for company
harvest moon

sheila windsor
(0,1,5) = 7 Pts

bomb shelter —
devastated by a broom
the spider's web

Gautam Nadkarni
(1,1,2) = 7 Pts

Broom/boom/bomb brilliant!

traveling spider
a bit of the summer cabin
comes home with me

Audrey Downey
(0,2,3) = 7 Pts

Spider webs and summer cabins are absolutely synonymous, aren't they? This has a light yet wistful undertone for me.

dusk lightning
a spider brings out
the killer in me

Collin Barber
(0,2,3) = 7 Pts

school holidays --
another spider caged
in a milk bottle

David Caleb Mutua
(0,2,3) = 7 Pts

shower stall--
no room for me
and the spider

(0,0,7) = 7 Pts

first night without him-
a daddy long- legs
shares her bedroom

Leslie Montgomery
(0,1,5) = 7 Pts

This refers to a spider where I come from; maybe not to everyone.

typhoon debris
a spider
starts over

Jan O'Loughlin
(0,0,7) = 7 Pts

abandoned hut -
a little spider
close to the moon

Israel Lopez Balan
(0,2,3) = 7 Pts

Fifteenth Place – Six Points
baby spiders
balloon to safety
the market falls

Jo McInerney
(1,1,1) = 6 Pts

one spiderweb
followed by another
how the years go by

Ella Wagemakers
(0,2,2) = 6 Pts

Our years do seem to unfold like a continuous strand of spider silk, and this haiku phrases the notion so very well. This is sublime.

spider silk —
what's spun
out of ourselves

Bill Pauly
(0,2,2) = 6 Pts

red light
noticing the spider is
on my side of the glass

(0,0,6) = 6 Pts

Sixteenth Place – Five Points
packing day
the wolf spider in my box
--can't take everything!

(0,2,1) = 5 Pts

tiny ripples on
still water...
a raft spider runs across

Rose Marie Stutts
(0,2,1) = 5 Pts

It could have been written better, but I like the essence. A raft spider running through the water circles.

hens fighting
over a dead spider --
windy evening

Mary Kaleche
(0,1,3) = 5 Pts

rainy day –
in the spider's cobweb
only a petal

(0,1,3) = 5 Pts

a spider webs
my bike to the house
day old bread

(1,1,0) = 5 Pts

Seventeenth Place – Four Points
a gingerbread horse
on an old cupboard
ridden by a spider

Zeljka Vucinic Jambresic
(0,2,0) = 4 Pts

What a surrealistic scene, a great one. The one from the flashing kind seen in the childhood and forgotten.

the spider's home
to keep mine clean

Shernaz Wadia
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts

leg missing a spider completes the web

w. f. owen
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts

stuck ...
and the spider

carol pearce-worthington
(1,0,1) = 4 Pts

spider's sticky trap
clings as I walk through:
I perform web dance

Penelope Sargent
(0,2,0) = 4 Pts

Heralding the autumn,
in a spider's web
the first leaf

Vasile Moldovan
(1,0,1) = 4 Pts

cricket call caught
in a silken scaffold
summer's end

Marilyn Hazelton
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts

garden gate
I walk through the spiderweb
woven last night

Sherry Weaver Smith
(1,0,1) = 4 Pts

august moonlight...
a spider walking
on a pond

Li Ree
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts

summer's end
the spider's shadow
from here to there

Sjs (Stevie)
(0,0,4) = 4 Pts

the spiders death
page three

(0,0,4) = 4 Pts

Eighteenth Place – Three Points
little black spider
fragile life literally
hanging by a thread

(1,0,0) = 3 Pts

early morning
walk , dodging
spider webs

(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

heat fatigue
the spider and I
laid out flat

(0,0,3) = 3 Pts

Nice bit of equality and humor.

Does the spider conserve body moisture this way? Both being laid out adds to the heat effect for the reader, anyway.

spider's maze -
little suns glow
in the breeze

Narayanan Raghunathan
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts

i spied her first
hidden in the fretwork
-- the spider

miriam chaikin
(1,0,0) = 3 Pts

I like the unnamed person in this.

a small spider
tethering the tropic palm
to the evening heat

Michael McClintock
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts

A cemetery –
a spider wove a web
on the fallen cross.

Zoran Antonic
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

home invasion
the spider's web
captures a fly

(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

still waiting...
full moon fills
spider's web

Gosia Zamorska
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

April morning jog
pair of dew drops shivering
in a spider's web

Ben Gieske
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

space walker
just that spider
spinning in the moonlight

Barbara Snow
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts

in a snore
you were gone

(0,0,3) = 3 Pts

This one has 8 little feet tickling in my trachea.

Startling! I can see somebody’s open mouth. Somebody who doesn’t even has a name, just like earthquake. Poor spider, finished with such an unnecessary death!

a dead fly stuck
in a dewy spider's web --
sunny morning

James Bundi
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

honeysuckle moon
a spider finds its
point of rest

Francine Banwarth
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

in the morning updraft
tiny spiders

Bridget Cougar
(1,0,0) = 3 Pts

grey mandala
between the holly-hocks--

Gene Doty
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

new curtains
on the future window -
the spider's creation

Mirko Varga
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts

summer into fall . . .
wandering spider

Mary Davila
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

General Comments:

There was so much lovely poetry but I chose the three that painted the most vivid picture in my mind's eye.

First Place – Twenty-six Points
our marriage
falling apart
he patches the roof

Carolyn Coit Dancy
(1,6,11) = 26 Pts

I really love the irony in this one with its allusion to the uselessness of linear logic in feeling situations!

new moon
filling a crack
in the skylight

Melissa Spurr
(1,6,11) = 26 Pts

Fine double resonance on "filling a crack"

Second Place – Twenty-Three Points
new sunroom
the dog
claims his spot

Frances McCarthy
(0,5,13) = 23 Pts

Of course. The most important entities get first choice.

Third Place – Nineteen Points
a cold night —
stuffing the gap between
the walls and the roof

David Caleb Mutua
(2,5,3) = 19 Pts

new design
the moon rises
in an antique mirror

ed markowski
(2,4,5) = 19 Pts

Fourth Place – Seventeen Points
for the leaky roof
a new bucket

Beth Powell
(1,3,8) = 17 Pts

I love the ironic humor here! The author seems to have known my father.

LOL! Nice turn-around on the theme.

porch paint
the dog next door
licks his paws

(0,2,13) = 17 Pts

It reads either for the porch owner or dog owner.

Echo of ‘fresh varnished floor’ and a different approach too.

Fifth Place – Fourteen Points
carpet selection
we find the perfect color
in a blade of grass

Susan Constable
(1,3,5) = 14 Pts

painted walls
— silence

(1,3,5) = 14 Pts

I like the starkness of this haiku, whose silence has voice. Very meditative. A haiku that will stay with me for some time.

autumn cleaning —
a desk drawer
full of dry pens

Israel Lopez Balan
(0,5,4) = 14 Pts

Waiting —
the crack in the ceiling

Elena Naskova
(0,5,4) 14 Pts

Sixth Place – Thirteen Points
home improvements
the cat unclutters
the highest shelf

(2,1,5) = 13 Pts

I like that we side with the cat here.

spring warmth
we paint the baby's room
robin's egg blue

Collin Barber
(1,2,6) = 13 Pts

Seventh Place – Twelve Points
fixer upper —
happily ever after
one nail at a time

Bridget Cougar
(0,3,6) = 12 Pts

Ain't that just the way of it.

Eighth Place – Ten Points
spring cleaning
moving the spider web
to another corner

(0,3,4) = 10 Pts

blue tarps
on the roof
cherry petals too

Barbara Snow
(0,2,6) = 10 Pts

The awareness of the petals seems to flutter down at the end, petal-like.

tearing down the deck,
I find a small handprint —
Tommy 1968

Jeff Hanson
(0,2,6) = 10 Pts

Ninth Place – Eight Points
home improvement —
my son asks his dad
for advice

max verhart
(1,2,1) = 8 Pts

Two very different kinds of improvement nicely brought together here.

heat wave done
she opens her window
for the western wind

Bill Pauly
(1,2,1) = 8 Pts

replacing the door —
across the home's threshold
a snail trail

Dorota Pyra
(1,1,3) = 8 Pts

Tenth Place – Seven Points
home improvement
touching up the paintwork
in Photoshop

Allison Millcock
(0,2,3) = 7 Pts

home improvement
my brother's new room
in the attic

tom painting
(0,2,3) = 7 Pts

Nice double-meaning here.

more water stains:
I have the plumber
on speed dial

(0,2,3) = 7 Pts

A long-standing frustration.

new windows
a hummingbird watches me
re-hang the feeders

Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,2,3) = 7 Pts

finishing touch
she blows out the renovation dust
from my temple

Juliusz Wnorowski
(0,2,3) = 7 Pts

Simply wonderful. I love the resonance of 'temple' here.

I like the use of "temple" here.

Eleventh Place – Six Points
spring dream —
building a tree house
to commune with the birds

Barbara Campitelli
(0,3,0) = 6 Pts

after the squall:
a new twig
in bird's beak

vishnu kapoor
(0,2,2) = 6 Pts

cleaning the closet —
a seashell
listening to the ocean

Deborah Finkelstein
(0,2,2) = 6 Pts

finally the fence!
now my house is ready
for morning glories

Tom M.
(0,2,2) = 6 Pts

This made me think about how individual all our ideas of the ideal home improvement are.

home improvement
an abusive husband
loses his key

(0,1,4) = 6 Pts

Improvement indeed! Very clever!

window enlargement
the sun bursts
through the wall

Tore Sverredal
(0,0,6) = 6 Pts

Twelfth Place – Five Points
global warming
the realtor tells me
I'll have sea views

Jo McInerney
(1,0,2) = 5 Pts


Deirdre Godwin
(1,0,2) = 5 Pts

Here's my thought process in the voting: Yes no yes.

bedroom improvement —
the silence when our eyes meet
across the old double bed

Li Ree
(0,2,1) = 5 Pts

house on the stock —
a hoarse cricket is
the sole owner

Constantin Stroe
(0,1,3) = 5 Pts

from one side
to the other —
porch chairs

(0,1,3) = 5 Pts

Thirteenth Place – Four Points
by the crumbling fence
the neighbor nails a new board

(0,1,2) = 4 Pts

in my backyard —
a hummock of
red sand

(0,1,2) = 4 Pts

tree house repairs
a nest of squirrels

Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,0,4) = 4 Pts

A charming selection of events.

crossing the grey street
all of a sudden
our whitewashed house

Adina Enachescu
(1,0,1) = 4 Pts

after the hail storm
every house
a blue bonnet

Ben Gieske
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts

Didn't get this one at first until a later haiku indicated that blue tarps might be frequently used in roof repair. Couldn't see why the flower 'blue bonnet' would spring up singly after a hail storm as they may en masse after a rain on the dry prairies of Texas.

upstairs downstairs —
the new wallpaper
starts to curl

Roberta Beary
(0,0,4) = 4 Pts

And they thought they were finished!

Love it! Whether it's Three Stooges or Laurel and Hardy, that's a classic home renovation image.

acorn woodpecker
drilling holes in the tree —
more storage space

Leslie Montgomery
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts

man of the house
raising the bedroom ceiling

Francine Banwarth
(0,0,4) = 4 Pts

our hut's rough floor
being smeared with cow dung —
mooing cows

Paul Omondi
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts

scrapes the shady side first
ladder among phlox

Gene Doty
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts

the almost music
of kids hammering together
a tree fort

John Thompson
(0,0,4) = 4 Pts

leaky roof . . .
playing with his boats
in the puddle

Mary Davila
(0,1,2) = 4 Pts

Look to a kid for examples of 'If it rains lemons, make lemonade' ... at least when it ain't Their lemons!

Fourteenth Place – Three Points
once again
a hammer in my hand
lord help us all

todd eddy
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts

painting the old house
but stopping at the eaves,
cobwebbed and beautiful

Michael McClintock
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

housekeeper's day off,
the flies and I
humming in the room

Gryta Wansdronk
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts

unwanted construction
on the side of my house

Bill Hudson
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

One more honey-do
dammit, — hoping doing it
for some Xmas peace.

Horst Ludwig
(1,0,0) = 3 Pts

room addition
loan process slows
as swallows build their nest

Harvey Jenkins
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

spring clearing...
while I repair my house
the cherry tree shades me

Vasile Moldovan
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

a red power washer —
the hummingbird defends
his petunias

(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

wet paint --
the old building shines
from a distance

kelvin mukoselo
(0,1,1) = 3 Pts

in the attic
a swarm of termites

Sjs (Stevie)
(0,0,3) = 3 Pts

General Comments:

I was initially a little annoyed with what felt like an unusually high senryu-like quotient here. Then I reminded myself that I hadn't been able to even write one haiku on this subject that I felt was worthy of sharing!

Thank you all for participating in the August 2008 Shiki Monthly Kukai.

We will be posting the September Call for Submissions on or about Monday, September 1st. See you then!

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