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The Shiki Monthly Kukai

November 2010 Kukai

Dear Friends,

Here are the results for the November 2010 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was Geese and our Free Format subject was Weaving.

Congratulations to Christopher Pickslay, winner of our Kigo section and to Cara Holman and Michael McClintock, winners of our Free Format section!


The haiku are listed in order of total points received from voters. The numbers reflect the number of voters who gave the haiku either three points, two points, or one point -- followed by the total points for all votes.

Those who were given less than three points and who requested anonymity in such a case are so noted.


In the listing below, after each poem the author is listed, and then a three digit code revealing how many 3-point, 2-point, and 1-point points were cast for this poem by the other participating poets.

(2,1,4 = 12) would indicate that the poem above received two 3-point votes, one 2-point vote, and four 1-point votes.

Voters comments are in italics below the respective poems.

November 2010 Results
Kigo Theme:
Geese
Free Format Theme:
Weaving

First Place - 28 Points
burial —
the bagpiper
parts the geese

Christopher Pickslay
(2,6,10) = 28 pts

While reading again and again, I listen to "Amazing Grace" from far away.

Original, thought-provoking, and mournful. Well done!


Second Place - 23 Points
solstice
the stone goose
fledged with snow

Earl R. Keener
(1,5,10) = 23 pts

A strong atmospheric haiku that resonates. The author has resisted the urge to report on actual geese; and we have in our mind's eye a constant reminder of the potential freedom of a young goose captured in stone.


Third Place – 21 Points
migrating geese
the boy throws one more
skipping stone

Petar Tchouhov
(0,6,9) = 21 pts

Two strong images of movement, and youth and freedom. Good use of juxtaposition.

Nice echoes in this.

There seems to be no direction connection between the fragment and the phrase, yet on a subconscious level, this resonates with me.


Fourth Place - 18 Points
migrating geese —
she reminds me
to buy coal

Jacek M.
(1,4,7) = 18 pts

departing year —
the cries
of wild geese

Cara Holman
(1,3,9) = 18 pts

time change . . .
the leading goose
falls back

Susan Constable
(0,5,8) = 18 pts

A good use of juxtaposition, I really like this haiku!


Fifth Place - 16 Points
departing geese . . .
women shaking walnuts
from the walnut trees

Michael McClintock
(2,4,2) = 16 pts

I enjoyed this haiku. Yet I wish the author hadn't repeated about walnuts in the last line, as the image was very clear. If the second use of walnuts was removed, this would be worth submitting to a haiku magazine.

wild geese
at the vanishing point —
his tractor slows

Ruth Powell
(0,5,6) = 16 pts

Simply beautiful.


Sixth Place - 13 Points
the sky
after departed geese
filled with silence

Juhani Tikkanen
(0,5,3) = 13 pts


Seventh Place - 12 Points
goose feathers
everywhere —
no guilt in dog's eyes

Petru-Ioan Garda
(1,4,1) = 12 pts

winter's evening
a wedge of geese
black out the moon

Mark Lonergan
(1,1,7) = 12 pts


Eighth Place - 11 Points
how to speak
of what i've never seen . . .
migrating geese

polona
(1,2,4) = 11 pts

I have every sympathy with this sentiment! No migrating geese around here either.

This one is stunning.


Ninth Place - 10 Points
at the airshow
flying in formation
the geese unnoticed

Elaine Riddell
(0,4,2) = 10 pts

winging geese
here and there
the snowflakes stick

Michele L. Harvey
(0,2,6) = 10 pts


Tenth Place - 9 Points
snow geese —
a vast white cloud rising
from the marsh

Carol Raisfeld
(0,1,7) = 9 pts

muted dawn
a flock of geese
roil the lake

Tom Painting
(0,1,7) = 9 pts

A powerful image that I would have splurged on but so little to spend (on votes).

twilight
this flight of geese
to a distant bell

Terry O'Connor
(0,1,7) = 9 pts


Eleventh Place - 8 Points
geese
somewhere
the sky

ARW
(0,3,2) = 8 pts

our old gander
feebly flapping his wings
geese calls from above

natalia kuznetsova
(0,2,4) = 8 pts

silver moon
a snow goose calls out
in the cold

Angéle Lux
(0,2,4) = 8 pts


Twelfth Place - 7 Points
My son's grave —
two Canada geese trim
the greening grass.

Zhanna P. Rader
(1,1,2) = 7 pts

migrating geese
hallway chatter
between classes

Carlos Gesmundo
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

a flock of geese
flits north across the full moon —
too late for goodbyes

Alegria
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

orange dawn
the last goose
flies away

Tito A. Ramos
(0,1,5) = 7 pts


Thirteenth Place - 6 Points
Geese departure . . .
sounds of wings dying away
little by little

Vasile Moldovan
(1,1,1) = 6 pts

deep sinking
into the goose down
of my dreams

Merrill Ann Gonzales
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

Cozy!

snow in our eyes
we track the broken
patterns of geese

Bill Pauly
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

Good use of an extra sense, that of "snow in our eyes". The author has also resisted the urge of using "vees" of geese, and has instead concentrated on the "broken patterns" of flight.

somewhere
geese are honking —
early morning traffic

gillena cox
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

early morning
the silence broken
by a single honk

Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

a vee of geese
touch down together —
Veterans Memorial

Cherie Hunter Day
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

from his wheelchair
he gazes at the geese
heading to sunset

Victor P. Gendrano
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

A poignant haiku. I wonder if the first pronoun is needed, after all we know it's a "he"? I also wonder if it should be "heading into sunset" which I feel would be fine without the use of a definite article? Despite my criticisms, I enjoyed this haiku, and it makes good use of making us carry on beyond the text.

hunter's blind
geese rise into
a leaden sky

Beth Richards
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

The uses of 'leaden' adds a subtle pun, which appeals to me.

the sky
already emptier
departing geese

Ann K. Schwader
(0,0,6) = 6 pts


Fourteenth Place - 5 Points
I look
The nest is still warm
Pointing south

Dimitri L.
(1,1,0) = 5 pts

honking geese
emerge from the mist —
peaceful morning

Ted van Zutphen
(1,0,2) = 5 pts

southbound canoe's
V-trail on the river —
migrating geese

Janice Hornburg
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

Arctic Snow Geese
and old friend
now single

Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

No time
to finish shaving
Canada geese

Ralf Bröker
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

near dusk;
a calligraph of geese darkens
the moon.

manoj saranathan
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

muted
by the first snowfall —
canadian trumpets

Jon Espen Vassbotn
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

empty sky —
a goose calling
for its mate

Nancy Nitrio
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

November dusk . . .
the wishbone cry of geese
carried on the wind

Francine Banwarth
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

I rather enjoyed the "wishbone cry" of the geese: imaginative use making this haiku standout.


Fifteenth Place - 4 Points
a group of tourists
at the lakeside inn —
cackle of geese

sanjuktaa
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

lingering rain
the low sky empty
of geese’s cries

Catherine J.S. Lee
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

This haiku impresses by the attention the author gives to the kigo -- to such an extent that the absence of the kigo is noticed. Beautiful!

Michaelmas dinner
a cooked goose
tells no tales

Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black
(0,2,0) = 4 pts

passing geese
wishing I had
a carport

James Sawers
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

I love the subtle humour. Here (Ireland) pigeon (or any bird guano) is considered 'lucky' - I wish the writer every good wish as he/she cleans the car.

geese heading south —
as one life begins
another ends

Liz Rule
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

winter geese
weaving in and out
of a "V"

C.P. Harrison
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

autumn magic
grandpa's cider sweetens
the cry of wild geese

Edward
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

our grief
on the wings of geese
returning

old pajamas
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

eulogy —
departing geese inscribe
the moon

Nancy Smith
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

Clever, although distracting punctuation. Still, this verse resonates.

I like the use of 'inscribe', which seems to make this familiar haiku image feel brand new.

departing geese —
in front of the nursing home
an old barking hound

Kaiser
(0,1,2) = 4 pts


Sixteenth Place - 3 Points
rest stop
a gaggle of Canada geese
by the roadside

Meredith Stern Cavalieri
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

group of geese —
a ray of sunshine
on their feathers

alex serban
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

boarded-up cabin —
goose track
across the wet porch

Michael Dylan Welch
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

honking geese
cross canyon sunset
echo returns

charlie smith
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

last of the geese
below the clouds
beside the mountains

DeVar
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

distant beat
of geese wings —
my humming stalls

James Dobson
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

my thoughts
with the wild geese
above the fog

Dejan Pavlinovic
(0,0,3) = 3 pts


Seventeenth Place - 2 Points
morning flyover,
geese honking
oblivious of us

Tom Conally
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

in the tranquil lake
a vee of geese traverses
fluffy clouds

Barbara A Taylor
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

in total darkness
geese honking honking
their OM

Robert Henry Poulin
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

we forget to talk —
listening to geese squawk
around our picnic

Bhalachandra Sahaj
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

geese grazing
boy slips and misses
the football

Chiisana Niwa
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

settling down
on the field . . . a blanket of
snow geese

Barbara Snow
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

a lightning:
geese change
directions

Narayanan Raghunathan
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

call of geese
from across the worlds —
ice moon

Ron C. Moss
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

migrating south
for comfort and warmth
with my goose down pillow

Bill Hudson
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

migrating geese —
he arrives with flowers
ten minutes late

Israel Lopez Balan
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

twilight ::
a sailboat,
a skein of geese

timothy russell
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

full of moon
snow geese return
light as feathers

Margaret Dornaus
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

lingering mists
part for a driven wedge —
geese in formation

Svetlana Marisova
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

butcher shop —
we speculate over
what makes geese vee

Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

Rocky shore
geese flying westward
farmer’s field.

Trevor Camp
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

high up
a chevron of geese perfectly
not so perfect

r. seretny
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

she will fly south
to warm her old bones —
the way of the geese

Marylouise Knight
(0,0,2) = 2 pts


Eighteenth Place - 1 Point
geese in flight —
a capital "V" attracts
every eye

Rita Odeh

out of haze:
one – now two geese and…
seven goslings!

Svein Lie

a geesplough heads southwards
over the village church
the churchbells applaudes in silence

Oddbjørn Aardalen

lone goose
in frosted pond —
a gap in the "v"

Terri L. French

Cackles split the air
Soft, white, eider-down pillows;
Not so silly goose!

Tanja Cilia

one last skein of geese
surrenders
earth to its murders of crows

Suzume

November . . .
is that the smallest goose
leading the flock?

Kirsty Karkow

Geese
cry skyward
to your absence

Donna Bauerly

all these years
our pond an overnight break
for geese heading south

michaelb2005

not a wake
a V of geese
out the fjord

og_a

birds of passage
a feather floats down
Niagara Falls

Garry Eaton

twilight
flicker of geese
memories of my mother

Chitra Rajappa

frozen resemblance
abandoned in a junkyard
wooden geese

Vida

geese in pairs over
darkening sky —
nursing a lonely drink

Vaidya Narayanan

cacophony
wave upon wave fills the sky
the lake with geese

maxianne

I can't resist this image of mirroring--a double world.

haunting call of geese
speaking of such wistful things
love and summer lost

Deirdre Godwin

crossing the moon
the geese on course
heedless of our gaze

jill

the lead goose
drops back crossing
only the light

Diane Mayr

a gust moves the curtain
the sound of a goose
catching a fish

Tore Sverredal


No points this time, sorry.
trumpeting geese
sound as chill as the air
 — empty deck chair

if

Blue angelic jets.
like a flock of metal geese,
"vee'd" the turquoise sky.

Robert C. Howard

Canada geese
in the grey ocean
ready to leave

Angelika

beings' victory
against gravity
V flight of geese

stops

A skein of geese
bending elegantly south.
New cars behind glass.

Horst Ludwig

goose blind
decoys tucked under
the overturned canoe

Alan S. Bridges

geese in fall term —
scratches across
the chalkboard-green pond

mechaieh

the geese's flight
determined to fight
the winter blues

John Tiong ChungHoo

not here long
the honk honk of geese
overhead

Harvey Jenkins

East Park geese
they show the quickest way
to schoolchildren

Alan Summers

on the green,
geese . . .
dropping new hazards

John Hubbard

late August —
geese gathering for passage
dawdle on the road

Ida Freilinger

lake waters
asleep  — wide awake
geese splashing down

Ben Gieske

Canada geese —
follow the leader
not child’s play

Carolyn Coit Dancy

low flying geese
pleasantly interrupting
6 p.m. news

Kaylene

earthbound I watch
a V of geese
going south

Frances O'Keeffe

in a field
ducks, geese, pukekos
coots slumber

Anne Curran

“V“ in the sky —
geese practicing departure
hissing and lisping

Patricia Lidia

hunter's moon —
a flock of geese guard
the horses

Anonymous

Honk honk honk honk honk
This pond is mine! All of it!
You stay out! Honk! Honk!

Geoffrey A. Landis

deep winter
geese gather
around open water

Marleen Hulst

geese flying high
in the frosty sky . . .
distant haven

Keith A. Simmonds

grey and white feathers
in the autumn meadow . . .
geese flew

Andrzej Dembonczyk

vee line honks
southward bound
winter ahead

Christine Howard

the memory
of last year's geese
this year’s lake

Anonymous

rude awakening
each autumn day at sunrise
wild geese fly by

Amicus

the river bank
a guano covered hillside —
Spring geese flowers

John Daleiden

a part of fall
leaving the fall behind
geese formation

Boris Nazansky

frost smoke,
dusk and thoughts . . .
do geese exist?

Li Ree

flying in V formation
air traffic controllers
canadian geese

dorothy j. kazmierzak

Wild Greylag geese,
flying in formation,
winter harbingers.

Jean Lewis

in formation
a flock of geese flying southbound
the 21 gun salute

Stevie Strang


General Comments:

I'd FAR more favourites than I had points to award.

With an increased number of entries, voting is becoming more and more challenging!

Thanks once again for lovely haiku.


First Place - 26 Points
garden spider —
weaving the dew
into its web

Cara Holman
(1,6,11) = 26 pts

Weaving dew unwittingly in its web? The two 'W’s' for me, too, got this vote.

reeds and river
weaving the mist
together

Michael McClintock
(1,4,15) = 26 pts


Second Place - 21 Points
deepening snow
the corner
the spider fills

Michele L. Harvey
(2,5,5) = 21 pts


Third Place – 18 Points
wake
a rosary woven
in the atheist's hands

Tom Painting
(2,3,6) = 18 pts

I liked the fact that there was movement and sound, and a punchline. It made me want to know more about the atheist, and a good haiku should make you want to think and feel beyond the boundaries of the actual words put down. the flute to my lips . . .
weaving sound
and silence

Li Ree
(1,4,7) = 18 pts

In music (and in life!) silence is as important as sound. I like the focus on something other than the usual visual images of haiku.

weaving their song
into a privet hedge
sparrows

polona
(0,3,12) = 18 pts


Fourth Place - 15 Points
a bedouin
woman weaves
the moon

og_a
(0,5,5) = 15 pts

So simple, yet evocative.


Fifth Place - 14 Points
finding threads
from my dreams
in your loom

Jon Espen Vassbotn
(2,2,4) = 14 pts

yarnspinner
weaving her stories
into rugs

Frances O'Keeffe
(0,2,10) = 14 pts


Sixth Place - 13 Points
Happy Hour
a drunkard weaves
his tale of woe

Terri L. French
(1,2,6) = 13 pts


Seventh Place - 12 Points
heritage village —
the weaver's bonnet
keeps falling off

Michael Dylan Welch
(1,3,3) = 12 pts

This one made me smile. I really like how it juxtaposes the construction of things (historical experience, weavers' products) with things that elude our control (that darn bonnet!).

new neighbours
sparrows weave their song
through the cedars

Susan Constable
(0,3,6) = 12 pts


Eighth Place - 11 Points
crows’ calls
woven into the branches
autumn dusk

Melissa Allen
(0,2,7) = 11 pts

cobwebs
hanging from her old loom
another story

maxianne
(0,1,9) = 11 pts


Ninth Place - 10 Points
weaving in firelight
reminded again
of my flaws

Francine Banwarth
(2,0,4) = 10 pts

I really like the last two lines, avoiding any possible cliches about the firelight doing this or that. I think a few of us, if we are honest, will reflect on our flaws, and it's a refreshing and honest approach.

bruised purple sky . . .
an Afghan weaver dyes
his wool to match

Kirsty Karkow
(1,1,5) = 10 pts

I really liked this haiku, although it's good enough not to need to state 'purple', and I feel it's worthy enough to be submitted to a good haiku magazine.

I like the sounds in this haiku - the Bs and Ps, the alliteration of Ws - and the mood that's achieved by the use of the fragment in conjunction with the weaver.

autumn evening —
cold wind weaves in and out
of our whispers

Alegria
(0,3,4) = 10 pts


Tenth Place - 9 Points
daydreaming
the old woman weaves
a dreamcatcher

Ted van Zutphen
(1,1,4) = 9 pts

Wonderfully evocative.

winter rain
weaves rivers down the window . . .
longing for you

Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,3,3) = 9 pts

recession —
in the old weaving mill
only the spiders

Kaiser
(0,2,5) = 9 pts

A haiku for our times, unfortunately . . . when spiders are the only weavers left in the mills.

warp and weft
the plain weave of our stories
yours and mine . . .

Margaret Dornaus
(0,1,7) = 9 pts

in a weave
of withered vines
last cricket

Ann K. Schwader
(0,1,7) = 9 pts

midnight bath —
moonlight weaves through
frosted panes

Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,1,7) = 9 pts

The contrast of hot and cold is effective, as well as the subtle pun on 'panes' whether it was intended or not. Perhaps even a relationship is warming up.


Eleventh Place - 8 Points
a single fly
finds the open coffin —
fingers interweave

Svetlana Marisova
(2,1,0) = 8 pts


Twelfth Place - 7 Points
we rest by a pond —
an oriole's reflection
weaving its nest

Zhanna P. Rader
(0,3,1) = 7 pts

sound of beating comb
the old weaver smiles
only for the picture

Angéle Lux
(0,3,1) = 7 pts

A great last two lines. I feel the first line should have had "combs" plural, my only criticism. One to be submitted to a quality haiku magazine.

I weave a silk scarf
between my fingers —
mulberry leaves

James Dobson
(0,1,5) = 7 pts


Thirteenth Place - 6 Points
summer camp
weaving class
empty

Carmel Lively Westerman
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

funeral day
cobwebs cover
granny’s loom

Tore Sverredal
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

rose trellis
shadows on the wall
woven by the wind

Adelaide B. Shaw
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

A lovely visual, accompanied by the sound and smell of summer. Great use of the senses!

A nice take on the word "weave" - I like how visually evocative this is.

harmattan morning —
a ray of light weaves through
cloud spaces

Nana Fredua-Agyeman
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

The Harmattan is a West African trade wind also known as "The Doctor". If it wasn't for the stricture for using a variation weaves, this haiku could also stand to be submitted for a good haiku magazine, and even be submitted for another haiku competition.

stick by stick
the house sparrows knit
the minutes of the long day

Suzume
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

Even a rhyme thrown in!


Fourteenth Place - 5 Points
floral worlds:
a butterfly weaves
new dreams

Narayanan Raghunathan
(0,2,1) = 5 pts

A weaving spider
on the window flowers budded
by hoar-frost

Oprica Padeanu
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

the cotton string
after careful scrutiny
is woven into the nest

Bill Hudson
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

winter winds
weaving a network
of sombre clouds

Keith A. Simmonds
(0,1,3) = 5 pts


Fifteenth Place - 4 Points
dream weaver
feathers from the web
sing my lullaby

Merrill Ann Gonzales
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

weaving clouds
over the church
clock ticking backwards

jansemann
(0,2,0) = 4 pts

intricately woven
brilliant carpet —
boys missing school

Vaidya Narayanan
(0,2,0) = 4 pts

autumn light
my granny is weaving
with gold threads

Petar Tchouhov
(0,2,0) = 4 pts

What a beautiful scene, well observed!

the shuttle
weaving through traffic
a skateboarder

Barbara Snow
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

closed factory . . .
spider weaves his web
on a power loom

Dejan Pavlinovic
(0,0,4) = 4 pts


Sixteenth Place - 3 Points
Weaving a haiku
into the thin swaths drifting
across the fall moon

Horst Ludwig
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

hanging by a thread
cobwebs spun into plant down
a hummingbird’s nest

Harvey Jenkins
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

In the sunlight
on the finely woven web
one droplet of dew.

Geoffrey A. Landis
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

winter geese
weaving in and out
of a "V"

C.P. Harrison
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

field trip —
the frayed weave
of the Civil War flag

aom (tim)
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

Nicely done -- the deteriorating artifact in contrast to the mention of a war meant (at least according to Union leaders) to keep the national fabric intact.

weaving
I prefer the warp
my dog the woof

Donna Bauerly
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

the rising sun
erasing the weaving
of jack frost

michaelb2005
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

butterflies weaving
children amidst the flowers
flashes of laughter

Ben Gieske
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

braided loaves
in a bakery window
feverish arias

Garry Eaton
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

she weaves her
way through the crowd —
stiletto heels

Synaida Kalahi
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

she arranges
his photos for the grandkids
weaving a life

Nancy Smith
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

cloud spaces —
moonlight weaving in
and out

Janice Hornburg
(0,0,3) = 3 pts


Seventeenth Place - 2 Points
Icy silver threads
woven thru the branches like
crystal tapestries.

Robert C. Howard
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

Lattice-work so fine
In, out, above and below . . .
Warm mixed-berry pie.

Tanja Cilia
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

In a black corner
the white spider weaves
a new cobweb

Vasile Moldovan
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

weaving project :
a Jacob's ram munches
in the back yard

ushi
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

coffee weaves thro'
tired veins:
high voltage surge !

Chitra Rajappa
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

mother finishes
the last thread of my shawl —
leaving for the monastery

Bhalachandra Sahaj
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

tight weave —
the cyclist's sleeves
cover his hands

DeVar
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

This is a really good example of zooming into the frame set up a haiku. Good descriptive use, and very atmospheric.

May Day in the park —
musical tapestry
woven in brass

if
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

it took awhile
weaving a line or two
together

James Sawers
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

weaving pattern
in these leaves
her wedding ring

Alan S. Bridges
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

faded tapestry
above the horsehair couch
grandma’s house

Carolyn Coit Dancy
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

drunken sailor
weaving along the docks
his patchwork life

Ruth Powell
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

unraveled
he weaves his way out
of the bar

Meredith Stern Cavalieri
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

cane rockers
potbellied woodstove
weaving yarns

Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

sunrise catches
a spider weaving a web
catching a moth

Chiisana Niwa
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

my daily work
weaving together
past and future

Anonymous
(0,0,2) = 2 pts


Eighteenth Place - 1 Point
counting each knot . . .
the nimble fingers of kids
in remote places

Barbara A Taylor

calm night . . .
those clouds weave
one dream after another

Rita Odeh

Oak trees
more leaves on the ground
than on the tree

Angelika Kolompar

last rollercoaster
weaving on the edge
of salt cloud

Ron C. Moss

wuthering wind
rainbows weave through spindrift
from the waterfall

Liz Rule

my breath weaves
the thread is
mam is dead

Bjørn

the spider weaves
a wispy web that covers
the idle loom

Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black

weaving through memories —
a yellowed photo with
grandmother to loom

Petru-Ioan Garda

field of corn
rows part and slant part and slant
 — anonymous weaver

miriam chaikin

labour of love
as she looms the thud
of an unborn child

john tiong chunghoo

October weaves a
coloured tapestry of leaves.
bright autumn carpet.

Jean Lewis

holidays —
memories of
grandmother weaving

Kaylene

regrets —
the loom at the thrift store
picked up
put down

jill

the storyteller —
her magical voice weaves
the cloth of our lives

Marylouise Knight

at each shuttle toss
her ticket to freedom closer —
weaving dreams

John Daleiden

argument
my fingers weave around
the blueberries

Anonymous

the BMW
weaving in and out of traffic
passing me up again and again

Stevie Strang


No points this time, sorry.
orb spider
weaving a silken message . . .
WELCOME!

Tom Conally

autumn
wind weaving trees
leaves let go — gone

Robert Henry Poulin

a shooting star
make a wish
another one?

Jean Noir

past . . .
the wind weaves, gust of snow
on a ski track

Svein Lie

the snake tattoo
near her navel
awakes, begin to stir

Oddbjørn Aardalen

warm and cold weaver
autumn will soon
have frozen tracks

stops

weaving magic
an old trumpet to his lips
jazz spills out

Carol Raisfeld

amid carefree hum
a spider keeps on weaving
undisturbed

natalia kuznetsova

Carried
by a shuttle through the shed
Mum's present

Ralf Bröker

spent lovers
weave into each other
into dream

Terry O'Connor

Who told her
to weave the leaves together?
Braid of maple stems.

mechaieh

cloud weaving
a plane does loop the loop
over a noisy seagull

Alan Summers

The sun
Striking the fountain
While water runs

Dimitri L.

a rust and yellow
mix of fallen maple leaves —
flame-point tapestry

Ida Freilinger

late for work,
she grips the handle
as we weave through traffic

Christopher Pickslay

wheeling
a weft of godwits
through a warp of air

Elaine Riddell

nature weaving
a new dawn —
baby yawning

Patricia Lidia

warp and weft
of the wedding throw
"Lover's Knot"

Beth Richards

a rowdy yarn
cussing those ornery sheep
she weaves a crooked scarf

Edward

Fifty years
anniversary party,
woven lives.

Trevor Camp

cedar bark and wool
each one takes a year to make
Chilkat honour robe

Deirdre Godwin

Bonfire flames leap
leaves curl
smoke weaves a message

Christine Howard

weavers guild headed home —
the ins and outs of fog

Sandy N.

a sudden slip —
her hair weave covered
with mud

Margaret Ndinda

under the tree —
she weaves his brown
dreadlocks

Ceciliah Wambui

bittersweet vines
woven into deadly wreaths
 — she plots her next book

Diane Mayr

warp and woof
the weaver's daughter wonders
which child is her

Bill Pauly

autumn goddess
weaves mountain leaves
into a textile fabric

Yuka Makishita

Election Day
the wisp of the fog weaves
through the pines

Jacek M.


General Comments :

Some great entries!

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