The Shiki Monthly Kukai

May 2010 Kukai

Dear Friends,

Here are the results for the May 2010 Kukai, wherein our Kigo subject was Fishing and our Free Format subject was Peace.

Congratulations to Michael McClintock, winner of our Kigo section and to Angele Lux, winner of our Free Format section!

The haiku are listed in order of total points received from voters. The numbers reflect the number of voters who gave the haiku either three points, two points, or one point -- followed by the total points for all votes.

Those who were given less than three points and who requested anonymity in such a case are so noted.

In the listing below, after each poem the author is listed, and then a three digit code revealing how many 3-point, 2-point, and 1-point points were cast for this poem by the other participating poets.

(2,1,4 = 12) would indicate that the poem above received two 3-point votes, one 2-point vote, and four 1-point votes.

Voters comments are in italics below the respective poems.

May 2010 Results
Kigo Theme:
Free Format Theme: Peace

First Place — 34 Points
fishing the shallows
hip-deep in
white clouds

Michael McClintock
(2,10,8) = 34 pts

Second Place — 22 Points
fishing alone
I cast a thought
on the stream

Bill Kenney
(0,7,8) = 22 pts

Nice expansion of the verb "cast" here... love the thought of that thought, arcing out over the water.

Third Place — 19 Points
a rainbow
out of the blue

Ben Gieske
(2,2,9) = 19 pts

A "language haiku" that also works as an image.

Well formed and within everyone's experience.

Fourth Place — 17 Points
watching hour —
the crescent hangs
in the fish hook

Vasile Moldovan
(3,2,4) = 17 pts

Fifth Place — 16 Points
after the splashing...
the shape
in the heron's neck

aom (tim)
(0,4,8) = 16 pts

Sixth Place — 15 Points
sliced lemons —
the faint scent of trout
still on my hands

(1,1,10) = 15 pts

Well formed and within everyone's experience.

city dock
two gulls ignore
the no-fishing sign

Roberta Beary
(0,3,9) = 15 pts

Seventh Place — 13 points
fishing together
a father and his son...
the same line

Keith A. Simmonds
(1,2,6) = 13 pts

fly fishing
the shadows cast

Darrell Lindsey
(0,4,5) = 13 pts

Eighth Place — 12 Points
annual fishing trip —
the salmon story
growing longer each year

Nancy Nitrio
(0,4,4) = 12 pts

gathering dusk;
the netted trout twitches —
one last time.

manoj saranathan
(0,4,4) = 12 pts

montana sky
in the arc of the fly rod
a rainbow

(0,3,6) = 12 pts

So many things come together in this moment, suggesting even to a non-angler the powerful lure (pun not intended but acknowledged) of fishing.

Ninth Place — 11 Points
old trout
belly to belly
with the sun

Nicole Hyde
(0,3,5) = 11 pts

A bit extravagant, perhaps, but it catches the mood in the moment.

As above so below.

Tenth Place — 10 Points
fish market —
an old lady
counting her money

Juhani Tikkanen
(0,4,2) = 10 pts

the first catch
spreading sunshine

Rob Scott
(0,3,4) = 10 pts

Eleventh Place — 7 Points
lit fish stall
open mouths darken
in the night

(1,1,2) = 7 pts

Many layers of reading and meaning here. My favourite in both sections this month!

breathless pond —
just the wiggling ears
of a fishing cat

Gryta Wansdronk
(1,1,2) = 7 pts

flooded gulley —
he fishes for his sandal
with a stick

Caleb Mutua
(1,1,2) = 7 pts

oh so relaxed,
the fishing pole
just a prop

Ellen Romano
(1,0,4) = 7 pts

opening day . . .
her creel overflows
with watercress

Bill Pauly
(1,0,4) = 7 pts

The Goddess' own.

a perch on the hook —
the eyes of my father
in his deathbed

(0,3,1) = 7 pts

I knew from the moment I first read this that there was a good chance it would make my final list. Gut-wrenching and spot on.

tug o' war
the trout on my line
the loon on my trout

maxianne berger
(0,2,3) = 7 pts

Twelfth Place — 6 Points
a smallmouth
takes the surface plug

Tom Painting
(1,1,1) = 6 pts

family folklore
father casts a tall tale
to his daughter

Anne Curran
(1,1,1) = 6 pts

High-tide now —
the whole ocean
where I'd stood casting

Keith Woodruff
(1,0,3) = 6 pts

on the pier
a coquette, fishing
for compliments

Cara Holman
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

fishing expedition —
the little one
learning patience

Barbara Campitelli
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

the line crossed
one angler
curses another

Michele L. Harvey
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

mosquito bites
the tip of my fishing rod
dips again

(0,1,4) = 6 pts

river bank
the fisherman concentrates
on his day dream

Audrey Downey
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

Thirteenth Place — 5 Points
streaks of cloud
a salmon darting in and out
of shadow

Catherine J.S. Lee
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

cusp of moon . . .
tossing fish heads
to the pelicans

Francine Banwarth
(0,0,5) = 5 pts

Fourteenth Place — 4 Points
backwater fog
I enter into
the shadow ahead

Donna Bauerly
(0,2,0) = 4 pts

arguing with the earthworm

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

airport approach —
a fishing boat and its gulls
in the morning haze

Isabelle Prondzynski
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

the slow move
of a tail fin

(0,1,2) = 4 pts

strangers rubbing
shoulders on a bridge
the salmon run

Garry Eaton
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

with each flash of lightning
:::::::GONE FISHING::::::::
on the Barber's door

Ron Moss
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

Fifteenth Place — 3 Points
brook trout leaps
ringlet to ringlet —
hapless mayfly

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

the float twitches
it's just the new moon
unhooking itself

Boris Nazansky
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

our new cat ...
urgent restock of neighbour's
koi pond

(0,1,1) = 3 pts

my reflection
the largest koi

j blain
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

catch of the day

(0,0,3) = 3 pts

Fathers Day
bright new set of lures
same old fishing hat

Meredith Stern Cavalieri
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

morrow moon
he fillets his catch of the day
on yesterday’s news

Angele Lux
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

Although I might have tightened up the last two lines to "filleting today's catch/on yesterday's news". Still I liked this.

Sixteenth Place — 2 Points
Clouds dance-
the moon safe from the waves
from the first trawl

Oprica Padeanu
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

Only fisherman
casting rumors into
soaking-wet moon

Kurt R. W.
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

dusk already…
at the end of the line
a plastic bag

Barbara A Taylor
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

morning sun
the pelican’s head returns
atop the wave

C.P. Harrison
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

fly fishing
a water skater
makes waves

Harvey Jenkins
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

shrimp boats
docked at the harbor...
oil on the water

A Dharma Bum
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

Seventeenth Place — 1 Point
Hidden behind fronds,
winter fish play dead,
fishermen leave.

Jean Lewis

fishing net bulging —
cold light
in the fishes' eyes

John McDonald

The carp and the trout
are swimming worryless-
The fisherman is a poet

Dan Norea

grey creek —
a rainbow trout at the end
of fishing line

Jacek M

overcast morning
the subdued glow of fish scales
clinging to the net


we break each night crawler
into four pieces


Two old anglers.
Wait. Release. Wait.
A boat goes by

Ralf Bröker

am i fat?
he squirms before

Terra Martin

chicken liver
on my young son's fish hook —
his anticipation...


children at the puddle
with sticks and balls
of white bread

Diane Mayr

hooked up by the same thought
angler and fish

Dejan Pavlinovic

rising trout —
one mayfly
is feathered

James Dobson

blushing dawn
in silver mirrors
first spring mackerel

Jon Espen Vassbotn

I Like how the "silver mirrors" suggest a silver mackerel in the last line.

on the angler's hook
rainbows on his mind


heading home
seagulls in our wake
gutting cod

Ruth Powell

nibbling my sushi
the koi in the tank

deanna tief

paddles at rest
over their beds
bluegill hover

Jennifer Corpe

setting day dance
lobster fishers
with girls in their arms

Beth Powell

near dusk —
filling up my fishing net
a dragon fly


praising it
over the picnic table
his prize-winning fish

carol pearce-worthington

No points this time, sorry.
naval cadets
master the waves in bay —
fishing nude

R.K. Singh

far out fishing
200 meter line
at the breaking point

Erik Boye

out of the river
into the pan
into the fire

miriam chaikin

fishing call —
a tube shaped net
of whale bubbles

Jan Jordan

lilypad jiggles
koi snacks

Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black

flooded park
the fisher reels in
a spoiled load of bread


pretty in pink
at the senior prom
fishing for compliments

Mary E. Gray

Big old frog
Jumps into the pond —
Stork is disappointed.

Geoffrey A. Landis

whip of the line
a Royal Coachman
in the eddy

Barbara Snow

clouds over the lake :
a kingfisher emerges from the shadow
with the catch

vishnu p kapoor

fishing lines cast
waist-high in water
anglers wait

Frances McCarthy

rainy morning —
a child trying to catch fish
at the damside

Stephen Macharia

otter from far shore
swimming toward
my fish!


a flurry of fish
high above gannets
line up for the catch

Elaine Riddell

wood chip smoker
on the patio —
salmon not yet caught

Leslie Montgomery

an osprey floats high
above river edge treetops


Garden pond,
cat strokes the water —
fish wave back.

Trevor Camp

hold full of herring
storm’s lone survivor limps in
price is high this year

Deirdre Godwin

boy watches heron
watching for a glint
on the water


cast, reel, tug —
my line empty
the pelican's bill full

Terri L. French

spreading nets
in a tranquil river
creates ripples.

bushra naqi

chasing goldfish
to clean the tank —
fleeting sun

Marylouise Knight

flowing river —
fishermen casts their nets

Edith Peacock

clouds scud —
a may pole angling
toward pisces


a tug on the line —
I smile at his excitement
but still think: weeds


Storm on the sea —
the fisherman leaves for home
by the empty net


preening older man
fishing for compliments
from the ladies

Hazel A. Witherspoon

pelican flying over
unaware of
goo-goo-eyed fishermen


First Place — 22 Points
window moon —
the quiet sound between
tick and tock

Angele Lux
(1,5,9) = 22 pts

Second Place — 19 Points
in the garden
that was her life ...

Carol Raisfeld
(3,2,6) = 19 pts

"the garden / that was her life" says a lot. A genuinely touching tribute.

Third Place -- 16 Points
evening walk —
leaving the house
to come home again

Marylouise Knight
(0,3,10) = 16 pts

Such sweetness here, both in the freedom to leave and in having a home to return to.

Fourth Place — 15 Points
Memorial Park —
alone with the silence
of the fountain

Isabelle Prondzynski
(1,3,6) = 15 pts

Fifth Place — 14 Points
new roof
the steady rhythm
of raindrops

Terra Martin
(0,3,8) = 14 pts

Lovely. To lie back safely dry and enjoy the soothing sounds.

Sixth Place — 13 Points
wishing well —
moonlight deep
into the water

aom (tim)
(0,2,9) = 13 pts

This suggests more than it says, which is entirely appropriate to the theme.

sudden shower —
silence of the

(0,2,9) = 13 pts

Seventh Place — 12 Points
summer breeze
his ashes swirl
in figure eights

(1,2,5) = 12 pts

quietly rocking
away the day
new grandmother

Roberta Beary
(1,1,7) = 12 pts

Evocative - I can see, hear, and feel this so clearly.

morning fog
trapped inside
the quiet

rob scott
(1,0,9) = 12 pts

sunset . . .
my silent

Francine Banwarth
(0,2,8) = 12 pts

Awesomely simply.

Eighth Place — 10 Points
the scent of lilacs
drifts through the screen porch
mom closes her book

(0,2,6) = 10 pts

A moment away from a moment away - lovely.

first snow
before daybreak
the silence

(0,2,6) = 10 pts

Been done before? Well, yes, but rarely more elegantly.

So soft, so snug, this serenity.

Ninth Place — 9 Points
early morning peace
coffee steam curls
in the sun

j blain
(0,3,3) = 9 pts

snow flurries . . .
the spaces between
a mother’s soft words

Ron Moss
(0,2,5) = 9 pts

Tenth Place — 8 Points
after the quarrel
and red lips

(1,2,1) = 8 pts

Sunday morning campus
the cathedral
of old trees

Audrey Downey
(0,1,6) = 8 pts

Eleventh Place — 7 Points
day’s end
an offshore breeze
dimples the lake

Tom Painting
(1,1,2) = 7 pts

the silence of the stars

Elaine Riddell
(0,1,5) = 7 pts

Twelfth Place — 6 Points
on the sign
of each protester

Beth Powell
(1,0,3) = 6 pts

easter moon
still the rising
not forgotten

Barbara A Taylor
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

This must be the Irish Easter Rising. A lovely enigmatic and very memorable haiku.

dusk —
in lilac bush
roosting sparrows

(0,2,2) = 6 pts

zen garden —
the eternal sameness
of movement

Nancy Smith
(0,2,2) = 6 pts

rolling seas
the long line of lights
inside the harbor

Michael McClintock
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

silent night —
my cat rubs her head
on my knuckles

Vivian Adhiambo
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

What cat lover could resist this?

peace rally . . .
candle to candle
we pass the light

Bill Pauly
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

Thirteenth Place — 5 Points
I leave alone
the leaves
on his grave

(1,0,2) = 5 pts

the cricket
finally sleeps

April Serock
(1,0,2) = 5 pts

This brought a rueful nod of recognition.

lightning flashes
birds and crickets
halt their song

Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

cool breeze
rippling my way

Bill Kenney
(0,1,3) = 5 pts

I love "rippling my way"

Fourteenth Place — 4 Points
At dead of night
the crickets' chirp dies down-
peace and quiet

Vasile Moldovan
(1,0,1) = 4 pts

evening sighs
the sound of wind
through pines

Cara Holman
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

uneasy peace —
together in bed
one back faces the other

vishnu p kapoor
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

in the spider web
the last twitch

Ben Gieske
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

in the night museum
Wyeth’s boots

Nicole Hyde
(0,1,2) = 4 pts

just as I was thinking
of everything wrong with the world —
cherry blossoms!

John Thompson
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

first killing frost
at last I can stop

Donna Bauerly
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

Every gardener will recognize this.

I Love this honest perspective on gardening as both a pleasure and a series of never-ending 'shoulds'

from mother's breast
nightly silence

Dejan Pavlinovic
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

wind chimes at dawn
I note my newborn's
Buddha smile

(0,0,4) = 4 pts

Original Face koan so much more comforting than Original Sin.

dark night
stepping out the back door
into peace

Ruth Powell
(0,0,4) = 4 pts

Resonant for me - "into peace" as its own line has a "just right" feel.

Fifteenth Place — 3 Points
i turned on the light
nothing there . . .

miriam chaikin
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

beer in hand
over the bones of thousands
boasting peace

R.K. Singh
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

the moment
she smiles

Ralf Bröker
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

drifting clouds —
a tree swaying silently
from side to side

Samuel Pirias
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

new song
for a new day —
the rain washed thrush

carol pearce-worthington
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

Robin's song...
the baby finally drifts
off to sleep

Michele L. Harvey
(0,0,3) = 3 pts

Sixteenth Place — 2 Points
the white dove flies --
a dark shadow over
an orphan's tear

Lucas Graczewski
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

Guns are still,
weeds grow in silence
where her home once stood.

Jean Lewis
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

cherry blossoms
floating upon the dawn ~
peace offerings

Keith A. Simmonds
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

calm grey rain
pink mallow in a clay pot
seeking nothing

Sheila K. Barksdale
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

It's the last line that raises this one.

the gentle creaking
from the old rocking chair...
peaceful memories

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

stolen afternoon...
toes and other things
lost in the sand

Diane Mayr
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

no barking
in the countryside —
lime trees in blossom

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

TV turned off
in the carpet sunspot
a cat belly-up

(0,0,2) = 2 pts

Seventeenth Place — 1 Point
now that you are gone
the house is strangely quiet
and oh so peaceful


incident tape -
peace lilies sway in the breeze

john McDonald

The sky in water —
the mild sun by the
lotus flower

Dan Norea

venetian blind
cutting swaths of yellow
the sun drifts in

maxianne berger

unpracticed year
anticipating good things
accepting what comes

Barbara Snow

eternal flame
at the war memorial...
piercing quietude

natalia kuznetsova

twilight fades
birdsong stills
night cloaks the garden

Frances McCarthy

after the party
deafening silence


baroque music —
the serenity of
making rosaries

Barbara Campitelli

spring breeze —
another turtle arrives
to the pond

Israel Lopez Balan

quiet day
at the cemetery
a mockingbird sings


children asleep —
shines on our house

James Dobson

after a dinner
a sudden fart —
then a deep peace

Juhani Tikkanen

vernal equinox
neighbors together tear down
the spite fence

Catherine J.S. Lee

drizzling morning —
ants slowly rebuild their soggy
nest together

Patrick Wafula

morning breeze —
water lilies swaying
on stagnant water

Abraham Muuo

green land —
two weaverbirds building
a nest together

Beryl Achieng

red-winged blackbird
feet slightly wet
standing on a lily pad


In the garden —
my grandma listens
the bird’s song


on sun-baked shingles,
well-fed stray

Kurt R. W.

end of war
the world seen through eyes
grown older

Ellen Romano

No points this time, sorry.
Israel's P.M.
welcomes progress towards peace
talks talks

Horst Ludwig

in conversation
Bono, Blair, and Gates
leave the economic summit


the soldier —
the girl saying no
his peace away

Gryta Wansdronk

After convalescence
Husband back at work
Quiet house

Mary E. Gray

scarred memories
cobalt blue sea glass

Garry Eaton

spring rain
the fresh colors of flowers
on my hippie van

Jacek M

hide and seek —
children secretly agree
where to hide

James Bundi

lotus blossoms
morning pond
untouched dew

Jennifer Stefanow

warm calm day
watching ladybugs


during her surgery —
Bach cello suites

Leslie Montgomery

lilac bloom enters
a third week while spinach
graces the table


Make a Zen garden,
move pea gravel all day long.
The stone Buddha smiles.

Trevor Camp

quiet zendo;
moving from zafu to zafu-
spring sunlight !

manoj saranathan

woodstove afternoon
outside fog and dripping trees
warmth and love within

Deirdre Godwin

stained glass display
the church choir
sings Hallelujah

Harvey Jenkins

Bombing in Baghdad
fields growing
fat on corpses

Mark Lonergan

in a verdant valley
serenity sits
pondering on itself

bushra naqi

imagine butter
melting on top of your head
warming ears lids lips


a green bike
against the red brick wall
at last, no wind


traffic jam
roll down the window
a whiff of honeysuckle--ahhh

Terri L. French

new pet —
the rhythmic dove coos
under our bed

Caleb Mutua

golden dawn —
birds singing among
sesbania trees

Annastacia Muthini

breezy morning —
six kids pull wheels
in the mud

Alex Wanambisi

no peace in the house
until he can get outside,
check on his seedlings


a board book
and the baby's warm head
autumn rain

Jennifer Corpe

drama roomie gone
palpable peace permeates
a wearied house

Hazel A. Witherspoon

a dove alights
upon the trellis...
the scent of newborn roses

A Dharma Bum

my nap cut short
by my neighbor’s mower
all tranquility lost

Meredith Stern Cavalieri

General Comments
The theme, Peace, brought out a number of interesting variations.

Many haiku in the free format section had very nice images, but needed better editing to be contenders for me. #59 could have an interesting 2nd line pivot if the dash was removed & an "a" was added. #74 needs to be pared down to essential words. e.g. ants rebuild / their soggy nest / . . . morning drizzle OR soggy morning . . . / ants rebuilding / their nest. Others had evocative images, but when read closely, all 3 lines were really part of one single image rendered basically as a sentence (free format #18, 91, 97 - kigo #57). These all have potential - they just need some more technical editing!

I had a more difficult time writing and judging this one. Peace can be difficult to define and to capture in words.

There were so many different aspects of Peace portrayed in each one of these haiku gems that it was very hard for me to pick the best ones. I narrowed my choices down but I would have given all the points to several more of them if I could. have. Nice work done by each poet.

It isn't fair, I tell ya--some of these people have actually gone fishing!

There were many good ones in the Kigo section this time. I had a hard time choosing!

Thank you for participating in the May 2010 Kukai!

We will announce the June Call for Submissions on Sunday, June 6, 2010. See you then!

With much appreciation,

Robert and George

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